How to enjoy my elder life.
학생이 쓴 원문
First of all I had to say that Sorry for the trouble also thankful for
your kindly and positively to correct to my kongglish sentences.
Really I don’t know how to express my idea and the thankful mind by my poor English level.
Today’s topic is how to manage and enjoy for my elder life.
As a matter of fact, casual elder lifes in Korea are not so satisfy and joyful.
By the family situation, property problem, others many reasons make
us unhappy and gloomy, however one of most serious matter is health of mental and physical.
Definitely I think that our health is more than valuable than money or social level.
In oder toachive above matters, I have to do outside activity as possbile and going to travell for others countries.
Finally learing Englsih is one of most valuable and effcective thing.
강사 첨삭
Good day, Covak!
I appreciate you for sending your composition to me.
You are always welcome so you don\'t have to worry. ^^
I actually appreciate you as well for sending your messages and writing your stories and descriptions on the pictures you are sending me.
It\'s a good way as well to practice your English skills.
You can do it! ^^
Enjoy the day and see you again tomorrow! ^^
~Teacher Gina
your kindly and positively to correct to my kongglish sentences.
>> First of all, I had to say sorry for the trouble and I\'m also thankful for your kind and positive corrections to my konglish sentences.
Really I don’t know how to express my idea and the thankful mind by my poor English level.
Really I don’t know how to express my idea and the thankful mind by my poor English level.
>> I really don\'t know how to express my idea and thankful mind in my poor English level.
Today’s topic is how to manage and enjoy for my elder life.
Today’s topic is how to manage and enjoy for my elder life.
>> CORRECT.
As a matter of fact, casual elder lifes in Korea are not so satisfy and joyful.
>> As a matter of fact, casual elders in Korea are not satisfied and joyful.
By the family situation, property problem, others many reasons make us unhappy and gloomy, however one of most serious matter is health of mental and physical.
By the family situation, property problem, others many reasons make us unhappy and gloomy, however one of most serious matter is health of mental and physical.
>> It is because of the family situation, property problem and other many reasons that make us unhappy and gloomy. However, one of the most serious matters are our mental and physical health.
Definitely I think that our health is more than valuable than money or social level.
Definitely I think that our health is more than valuable than money or social level.
>> Definitely, I think that our health is more valuable than money or our social level.
In oder toachive above matters, I have to do outside activity as possbile and going to travell for others countries.
>> In order to overcome the matters above, I have to do outside activities as much as possible and travel to other countries.
Finally learing Englsih is one of most valuable and effcective thing.
Finally learing Englsih is one of most valuable and effcective thing.
>> Finally, learning English is one of the most valuable and effective thing.
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