How to get a boyfriend2

2017-05-11 · 첨삭 강사 Sophia

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After that, I have to go to the student council. So I need to maintain a good image during my university life. If I don`t have any status, it will be too burdensome for him so I have to use my student council status naturally. And I let the students council members like Highlight. Then I can invite them for celebrating our School Festival. I think most students don't oppose. Because Highlight is the best. Third, I will go to the waiting room thanks to student council. Acutally this idea is from the book that we called ‘Fanfic’ in Korea. In that book, the main girl character and doo jun know each other because of that. Although it was a fiction I was really envy of it. Fourth, I will talk with him a lot. This step is necessary. I know many things about him but he don`t. I know that his ideal is a small and cute girl. That makes me sad. However, I try to make him know me. Fifth, I send a direct message in Instagram and keep contact with him. At the end he and I will be dating.

강사 첨삭

Hello! Happy Thursday!

I understand that English could be really difficult.
But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it..
You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great. ^_^
Here are my corrections for you:


After that, I have to go to the student council.

>>CORRECT

So I need to maintain a good image during my university life.

>>CORRECT

If I don`t have any status, it will be too burdensome for him so I have to use my student council status naturally.

>>DID YOU MEAN: If I don\'t have any status, it will be a burden for him. So I have to use my student council status naturally.

 And I let the students council members like Highlight.

>> DID YOU MEAN: And make the student council members to be the \"Highlight\".

 Then I can invite them for celebrating our School Festival.

>>Then I can invite them to celebrate our school festival.

 I think most students don\'t oppose. Because Highlight is the best. 

>> I think most students will not oppose because the Highlight is the best.
 Third, I will go to the waiting room thanks to student council.

>> Third, I will go to the waiting room. Thanks to the student council.

 Actually this idea is from the book that we called ‘Fanfic’ in Korea.

>> Actually, this idea came from the book that we called ‘Fanfic’ in Korea.

 In that book, the main girl character and doo jun know each other because of that.

>>CORRECT

Although it was a fiction I was really envy of it.

>>Although it was a fiction, I was really envious about it.
 Fourth, I will talk with him a lot.

>> Fourth, I will talk to him a lot.

This step is necessary.

>>CORRECT

I know many things about him but he don`t.

>> DID YOU MEAN: I know many things about him but he doesn\'t really know me.

I know that his ideal is a small and cute girl.

>> I know that his ideal girl is small and cute.

That makes me sad.

>>CORRECT

However, I try to make him know me. 

>> However, I\'ll try to make him know me.
 Fifth, I send a direct message in Instagram and keep contact with him.

>> Fifth, I\'ll send a direct message on Instagram and keep contact with him.

At the end he and I will be dating.

>>CORRECT

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