How to get back

2012-03-21 · 첨삭 강사 Janette

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What part of your life would you like to happen again? When i was in the elementaryschool, i was get a good grade so i get slide phone. So i would like to it becomes one more time. i'm so sad for when i was elementary school there dind't existence smart phone. and i think about i want reback at that time. that was my hope my happily.

강사 첨삭

Hi my dear [이름] ^^ Oh yes, it is good to reminisce the memories we had in the past and sometimes, it helps do better everyday. I do believe that at this time, you are very studious and diligent. I have seen your passion during our class my dear [이름]. But if you think, you need more, then study more, but make sure that you will not overdo it, okay? This time, you can do your best and maybe you will receive a smart phone. I really hope you can have it.^^ Everytime I read your composition I feel happy. Thank you and have a good night, I\'ll see you later in class.^^ Janette~ What part of your life would you like to happen again? >> Correct!When i was in the elementaryschool, i was get a good grade so i get slide phone. >> When I was in elementary, I got a good grade so my parents gave me a slide phone. >> When I was in elementary, I received a slide phone because my grades were good.So i would like to it becomes one more time. >> So, I would like to get good grades again. i\'m so sad for when i was elementary school there dind\'t existence smart phone. >> I\'m sad because there was no smart phone when I was in elementary. and i think about i want reback at that time. >> As I ponder, I wanna go back to the time when I was an elementary student. that was my hope my happily. >> That is my wish.

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