How to influence
학생이 쓴 원문
When a person becomes popular or famous for his or her accomplishments or talent, mass media covers their successes, where they were born , how they grew up and how they made efforts to succeed. Even what they eat and enjoy is many people\'s interest. Their fans like to follow and mimic their paths and daily patterns. So the fans visit their hometown and try food that they used to enjoy. For some fans, it is like a kind of pilgrimage.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Gi [이름]!
I agree with you. popular people can make unpopular places popular. Some people might find it interesting even if it\'s ordinary just because it\'s where their idol lived. In a sense it can be beneficial to people in those cities.
- T. Caitlyn
When a person becomes popular or famous for his or her accomplishments or talent, mass media covers their successes, where they were born , how they grew up and how they made efforts to succeed.
>> CORRECT
Even what they eat and enjoy is many people\'s interest.
>> Even what they eat and enjoy is of interest to many people.
Their fans like to follow and mimic their paths and daily patterns.
>> CORRECT
So the fans visit their hometown and try food that they used to enjoy.
>> CORRECT
For some fans, it is like a kind of pilgrimage.
>> CORRECT
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