How to less junk food
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Long ago, I often had a lot of junk food.
For example, ramen, bread, sweet snacks, candy, chocolate, soda....
Provably that was when I was in my 20-30s.
At that time, I weighed 10Kg more than now.
So my health was getting worse.
I decided to eat 3 meals a day instead of eating less junk food for my health.
I think if we focus on health rather than life styles, change will happen
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름] Ha!
Good for you.
You were able to overcome an impossible task.
You have to give me some tips.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
Long ago, I often had a lot of junk food.
>> Long time ago, I often had a lot of junk food.
For example, ramen, bread, sweet snacks, candy, chocolate, soda....
For example, ramen, bread, sweet snacks, candy, chocolate, soda....
>> For example, I used to love eating noodles, bread, sweet snacks, candy, chocolate, soda and others.
Provably that was when I was in my 20-30s.
Provably that was when I was in my 20-30s.
>> That was probably in my 20s to 30s.
At that time, I weighed 10Kg more than now.
At that time, I weighed 10Kg more than now.
>> At that time, I weighed 10 kg more than now.
So my health was getting worse.
So my health was getting worse.
>> So my health just kept getting worse.
I decided to eat 3 meals a day instead of eating less junk food for my health.
I decided to eat 3 meals a day instead of eating less junk food for my health.
>> I decided to eat 3 meals a day instead of eating junk food for my health.
I think if we focus on health rather than life styles, change will happen
I think if we focus on health rather than life styles, change will happen
>> I think if we focus on health rather than lifestyle, change will happen.
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