How to relieve stress?

2022-06-07 · 첨삭 강사 Miya

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First of all, I exercise after work. I especially like to play table tennis. All other stresses are forgotten while playing table tennis. The next day, when I encountered the situation with a new mind, I sometimes changed my way of looking at the problem, and in the end, I experienced that the problem was solved more easily than I thought. When I experience stress that I need to overcome right away, I take a deep breath or take some time alone. Sometimes I pray that I will be able to speak and act worthily. Then it really helps a lot. But when I\'m stressed, sometimes I think it\'s necessary to express my feelings directly. I think it can prevent greater stress.

강사 첨삭

Good afternoon, Elliot! 


Thank you for answering the Homework question. Please take note of the corrections/ suggestions below: 


Writing Task:  How to relieve stress? 


Your Answer:  


First of all, I exercise after work. I especially like to play table tennis. All other stresses are forgotten while playing table tennis. The next day, when I encountered the situation with a new mind, I sometimes changed my way of looking at the problem, and in the end, I experienced that the problem was solved more easily than I thought.


When I experience stress that I need to overcome right away, I take a deep breath or take some time alone. Sometimes I pray that I will be able to speak and act worthily. Then it really helps a lot.

But when I\'m stressed, sometimes I think it\'s necessary to express my feelings directly. I think it can prevent greater stress.


Corrected Version: 


First of all, I exercise after work. I especially like to play table tennis. All stressful things are forgotten while playing table tennis. It helps me when I encounter stressful situations with a fresh mind and I am able to change my way of looking at the problem. In the end,  the problem is easily solved than I anticipated. 

When I am in stressful situations, I take a deep breath or take some time alone for myself. Sometimes I pray that I will be able to speak and act worthily. Then it really helps a lot.

But when I\'m stressed, sometimes I think it\'s necessary to express my feelings directly. I think it can prevent greater stress.


Thank you for sharing your thoughts with me. :) 


Have a great night ahead and see you! 


~Miya ^^

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