How will India and China affect the environment in the future?(ANSWER)

2019-03-18 · 첨삭 강사 Charry

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I think both of two countries will distroy the environments in Earth. China is making a lot of fine dusts, and India is making a lot of natural disasters. Due to the fine dust of India and China, the Earth\'s population will gradually decrease, and the Earth\'s nature will become more and more polluted. And, fine dust measures could run out of state legislation. Also, the Earth\'s atmosphere will turn gray, and the ozone layer will be distroyed. Then, they make global warming worse. If global warming gets worse, the ice in the South Pole and North Pole will melt, and the sea level will rise and the small islands will be sink. If this condition continues to worsen, the Earth will be perish.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]!^^

It\'s a fine Monday night, isn\'t it?
Thanks for taking the time to write this awesome essay despite your busy schedule.

I loved reading about your opinions in this matter.
It felt like I was reading an essay from an adult. kkk.

Anyway, I agree to everything that you\'ve mentioned.

I think these two countries are the biggest contributors of pollution on Earth.

I hope they would be more sensitive about it.
Anyhow, I\'ll see you again tomorrow.
Take care always. ^^

~Teacher Charry


I think both of two countries will distroy the environments in Earth.

>> I think both countries will distroy the environments in Earth.

China is making a lot of fine dusts, and India is making a lot of natural disasters.

>> CORRECT! ^^

OR >> China is making a lot of fine dusts and India is making a lot of natural disasters.

Due to the fine dust of India and China, the Earth\'s population will gradually decrease, and the Earth\'s nature will become more and more polluted.

>> Due to the fine dust from India and China, the Earth\'s population will gradually decrease, and the Earth\'s nature will become more and more polluted.
And, fine dust measures could run out of state legislation.

>> In addition, the fine dust concentration could run out of state legislation.

Also, the Earth\'s atmosphere will turn gray, and the ozone layer will be distroyed.

>> Also, the Earth\'s atmosphere will turn gray, and the ozone layer will be destroyed.

Then, they make global warming worse.

>> CORRECT! ^^

If global warming gets worse, the ice in the South Pole and North Pole will melt, and the sea level will rise and the small islands will be sink.

>> If global warming gets worse, the ice in the South Pole and North Pole will melt, and the sea level will rise and the small islands will sink.
If this condition continues to worsen, the Earth will be perish.

>> If this condition continues to worsen, the Earth will perish.

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