How will people communicate in the future?

2017-04-12 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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In the near future, Communiaction device will be developed by the experts. To be specific, I can`t accurately expect that what type of device will be developed. However, Refer to some movie scene they are using only thin films to conversation others without any hardwares. Only thin films include hardware, so it is possible to operate simply. I have confidence that item because when I saw the some movie at that time they are using some of new technical in the movie. but some of item introduced in a movie have been releasd few years ago like a tablet pc. And then, I make sure that, They are giving a chance to use that item for free. because instead of receving the fees, they will obtain the benefit by the advertise in installing some programs. so, Expert will make a new programs to earn the money. Actually, I wonder that what item will be released. Maybe they will help people the most comfortable life.

강사 첨삭

Hi JM,
I am glad that you\'re able to express yourself in writing. Just continue to practice because this could really help you with your skills in English.
Take care and God bless!!!
Have a great day!!!
Thank you for your essay!!!
T. Jeny

In the near future, Communiaction device will be developed by the experts.
>>In the near future, communication devices will be developed by experts.
To be specific, I can`t accurately expect that what type of device will be developed.
>>To be specific, I can`t accurately expect what type of device will be developed.
However, Refer to some movie scene they are using only thin films to conversation others without any hardwares.
>>However, if we will refer to some movies, they are only using thin films to converse with other people without any hardware.
Only thin films include hardware, so it is possible to operate simply.
>>Thin films include hardware, so it is possible to simply operate it.
I have confidence that item because when I saw the some movie at that time they are using some of new technical in the movie.
>>I feel confident about that item because I saw in some movies, they are using new technology.
but some of item introduced in a movie have been releasd few years ago like a tablet pc.
>>But some of the items that were introduced in movies were released a few years ago like the tablet PC.
And then, I make sure that, They are giving a chance to use that item for free.because instead of receving the fees, they will obtain the benefit by the advertise in installing some programs.
>>I am pretty sure that they are giving a change for people to use it for free because instead of receiving payments from people they will obtain benefits from the advertisements in installing their programs.
so, Expert will make a new programs to earn the money.
>>Thus experts will make new programs to earn money.
Actually, I wonder that what item will be released.
>>Actually, I wonder about what item will be released.
Maybe they will help people the most comfortable life.
>>Maybe it will make people\'s lives more comfortable.

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