How would life be without music?
학생이 쓴 원문
I think that music is a kind of painting.
Because it make a life colorful and diverse.
Then our life would be simple not diverse without music.
And diversity is one of most important factors of creativity.
In short, our life is going to be not creative without music.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Ian! Thank
you for doing your homework. Your
sentence construction is getting better. Great!
- Debbie
>> I think music is a kind of painting.
Because it make a life colorful and diverse.
Then our life would be simple not diverse without music.
And diversity is one of most important factors of creativity.
In short, our life is going to be not creative without music.
Because it make a life colorful and diverse.
>> It is because it makes our lives colorful and diverse.
Then our life would be simple not diverse without music.
>> Hence, our lives would be simple without music.
And diversity is one of most important factors of creativity.
>> Diversity is one of the most important factors of creativity.
In short, our life is going to be not creative without music.
>> In short, we would not be creative without music.
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