How would you compare yourself now to the old you?

2021-12-10 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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When I was a kid, I was a little shy about meeting new people and adepting to a new environment. I was very serious about everything and also I obeyed a rule very thoroughly. I didn\'t look a thing with many perspectives and I didn\'t have that much courage. But now, I ain\'t shy about meeting new people and going to a new space. I can joke with my friends and also I can think about a rule with my own perspective. I can see a thing with carious kinds of perspectives and I have a lot of courage.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]:) 

Those are huge changes. It made you more mature. That\'s a good thing. :)

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I\'m so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

-Teacher Elise

When I was a kid, I was a little shy about meeting new people and adepting to a new environment.
>> When I was a kid, I was a little shy when meeting new people and adapting to new environments. 

I was very serious about everything and also I obeyed a rule very thoroughly.
>> I was very serious about everything and I also obeyed rules very thoroughly.

I didn\'t look a thing with many perspectives and I didn\'t have that much courage.
>> I didn\'t look like a person with many perspectives and I also didn\'t have much courage. 

But now, I ain\'t shy about meeting new people and going to a new space.
>> But now, I\'m not shy about meeting new people and going to new places anymore. 

I can joke with my friends and also I can think about a rule with my own perspective.
>> CORRECT

I can see a thing with carious kinds of perspectives and I have a lot of courage.
>> I can see things in different perspectives and have a lot of courage. 

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