How would you define the word "home"?

2014-09-30 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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Home is a place where I can take a rest escaped from the battle field and recharge to go to the field again. Home is something that I can find a reason for my being. Home is the safest place where I can be naked, both emotionally and physically and I can be 100 percent me. I do not need to hide something of me. It’s where I don’t have to be perfect. As I can take off my ties, working uniforms and shoes when returning home, I can disarm and relax. My wounded body and mind can be cured at home. I can ease tension and put my guard down at home no matter how hard time I had outside of home. Home is a zone where my boss, pesky customers, and the fierce competition are absent and where the absurdities of the day can be shared―unchecked, unedited, and without remorse. Another connotation of home is that I am responsible for supporting and taking care of my family. The burden to support my family is placed on my shoulder. There is no space only for me to reflect about my life.

강사 첨삭

It\'s a Terrific Tuesday Sir [이름], How\'s the weather in your country? It\'s raining again in my city. =c I hope that you had an awesome day at work. I love the topic we had last night. Of course, I am excited to hear your ideas later. I am impressed! You used various expressions in elaborating your ideas.  Keep it up! Have a great day.Teacher Nina   Home is a place where I can take a rest escaped from the battle field and recharge to go to the field again. >> Correct >> OR: Home is a place where I can take a rest,  escape from the battle and recharge to go to the field again. Home is something that I can find a reason for my being. >> Home is a place where I can find the reason for my being. Home is the safest place where I can be naked, both emotionally and physically and I can be 100 percent me. >> Home is the safest place where I can be naked, both emotionally, physicall and I can be true to myself. I do not need to hide something of me. >> I do not need to hide something about me. It’s where I don’t have to be perfect. >> Correct As I can take off my ties, working uniforms and shoes when returning home, I can disarm and relax. >> Correct My wounded body and mind can be cured at home. >> Correct I can ease tension and put my guard down at home no matter how hard time I had outside of home. >> Correct >> OR: I can ease the tension and put my guard down at home no matter how hard time I had outside. Home is a zone where my boss, pesky customers, and the fierce competition are absent and where the absurdities of the day can be shared―unchecked, unedited, and without remorse. >> Correct Another connotation of home is that I am responsible for supporting and taking care of my family. >> Correct The burden to support my family is placed on my shoulder. >> Correct There is no space only for me to reflect about my life. >> Did you mean: I don\'t have a specific place for me to reflect about my lice. >> OR: There is no space for me to reflect about my life.>> OR: I don\'t have my own space to reflect about my life.

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