How would you describe a healthy diet
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I think healthy diet should be balanded diet.
It has to contain proper percentage of carbohydrates, proteins, fats and vitamins.
Moreover, If it has so much sugar, it can be healty food
I have a diabetics familly history so I often check sugar contains on a nutrition label on products and try not to eat a lot.
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I think healthy diet should be balanded diet.
>> To my way of thinking, a healthy diet should be a balanced diet.
It has to contain proper percentage of carbohydrates, proteins, fats and vitamins.
>> OR: Our diet has to contain the right proportion of essential nutrients, such as carbohydrates, proteins, fats, and vitamins.
Moreover, If it has so much sugar, it can be healty food
>> Moreover, if it has too much sugar, it can\'t be considered healthy.
I have a diabetics familly history so I often check sugar contains on a nutrition label on products and try not to eat a lot.
>> Diabetes runs in my family so I often check the sugar content on the nutrition label on products and try not to eat a lot.
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