How would you describe your experience of having children?

2016-02-22 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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When my wife gave my daughter a birth, I appreciated God for having a baby and was delighted because we’ve been waiting for it for a long time since we got married. I actually did not contemplate having children and just thought it as a social norm and a natural thing. However, as I raise my daughter, I become realize that having a child requires more burden and responsibility as a parent. Obviously now I cannot think of my life without my daughter because my life becomes much richer in term of at least emotional perspective and happier. She gives me a joy and is a reason for my hard work. Moreover, people’s marriage won’t last long unless they have children. When they have been married for many years, they become losing interest on their spouses and their love will cool down to the level of showing indifference to each other. Parenting changes you. People expect this, but they don’t expect just how radically it would. Your life gets realigned to one single creatuer, your child.

강사 첨삭

Good afternoon, Sir [이름]!

Happy Monday. ^^
Thank you for sharing your experience of having a child.

I appreciate it a lot.

Have a great day.
Teacher Nina


When my wife gave my daughter a birth, I appreciated God for having a baby and was delighted because we’ve been waiting for it for a long time since we got married.

>> When my wife gave birth to my daughter, I appreciated God for having a baby and was delighted because we’ve been waiting for it for a long time since we got married.

I actually did not contemplate having children and just thought it as a social norm and a natural thing.

>>  correct

However, as I raise my daughter, I become realize that having a child requires more burden and responsibility as a parent.

>> However, as I raise my daughter, I realized that having a child requires more burden and responsibility as a parent.

Obviously now I cannot think of my life without my daughter because my life becomes much richer in term of at least emotional perspective and happier.

>>  correct

She gives me a joy and is a reason for my hard work.

>> She gives me job and reason to work hard.

Moreover, people’s marriage won’t last long unless they have children.

>>  correct

When they have been married for many years, they become losing interest on their spouses and their love will cool down to the level of showing indifference to each other.

>>  correct

Parenting changes you.

>>  correct

People expect this, but they don’t expect just how radically it would.

>>  correct

Your life gets realigned to one single creatuer, your child.

>>  correct (spelling check: creature ^^)

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