How would you want to spend a long holiday?

2021-07-08 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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In my case, I usually take a rest in my house. My family has barely gone outside or traveled on holidays. Instead of going outside, we tend to enjoy a holiday inactively in our house. However, I am an extrovert, I prefer to go outside and do some activities. Therefore, if I have a long holiday, I will travel and go to see a sea. I like to watch scenery and sightsee many naturalistic places, so sea is an approp[이름]te place to trip. I also enjoy my trip because I like to make a schedule. I will visit some places and make good memories and then I will take a rest when I come back home.

강사 첨삭

In my case, I usually take a rest in my house. 
>>> correct  
My family has barely gone outside or traveled on holidays. 
>>> correct 
Instead of going outside, we tend to enjoy a holiday inactively in our house. 
>>> correct  
However, I am an extrovert, I prefer to go outside and do some activities.
>>> correct   
Therefore, if I have a long holiday, I will travel and go to see a sea. 
>>>  OR: Therefore, if I have a long holiday, I will travel and go to the sea.   
I like to watch scenery and sightsee many naturalistic places, so sea is an approp[이름]te place to trip. 
>>> I like to watch sceneries and sightsee many nature places, so sea is an approp[이름]te place to go on a trip.    
I also enjoy my trip because I like to make a schedule. 
>>>  correct 
I will visit some places and make good memories and then I will take a rest when I come back home.
>>> correct   

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