How would your life change if all your technological devices were taken away for a week?
학생이 쓴 원문
I miss the times when we didn’t have advanced technical devices such as laptops or smartphones. I sometimes dream of my life that makes me stay away from all the modern technologies. I don’t have to be in an alert to respond to any calls or contacts from my company. I can manage my free time after the regular work hours without being interrupted. I might enjoy more tranquil and less stressful life without such gadgets. Whenever advanced technologies were introduced on the market, we expected that they would greatly help us improve our well-being. It is true that such technologies have resulted in a lot of changes in our lives in a positive way, however, they have also brought us unexpected side effects. We are being connected 24/7 to others, so that we became slaves of such technologies. Weighing up benefits over the downsides, the former still outpace the latter, however, we need to make an effort to reduce the downside of the technology. Without devices, I would feel inconvenient.
강사 첨삭
Good afternoon, Sir [이름]!
Happy Thursday!
I am so grateful that you always find time to write your ideas.
You are right! It is good to spend our time without our gadgets.
We should see to it that if we are with our family, relatives or friends we shuldn\'t use our cellphones.
We should cherish the time together. I guess we can talk about the side effects of being addicted to gadgets in our class.
See you.
Teacher Nina
I miss the times when we didn’t have advanced technical devices such as laptops or smartphones.
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I sometimes dream of my life that makes me stay away from all the modern technologies.
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I don’t have to be in an alert to respond to any calls or contacts from my company.
>> correct
I can manage my free time after the regular work hours without being interrupted.
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I might enjoy more tranquil and less stressful life without such gadgets.
>> correct
Whenever advanced technologies were introduced on the market, we expected that they would greatly help us improve our well-being.
>> correct
It is true that such technologies have resulted in a lot of changes in our lives in a positive way, however, they have also brought us unexpected side effects.
>> correct
We are being connected 24/7 to others, so that we became slaves of such technologies.
>> correct
Weighing up benefits over the downsides, the former still outpace the latter, however, we need to make an effort to reduce the downside of the technology.
>> correct
Without devices, I would feel inconvenient.
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