how you will spend Chuseok in a maximum of 5 sentences.

2015-09-30 · 첨삭 강사 Carmen

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Today is the third day of the holiday. Now I will illustrate how I spent the Chuseok. On the first day, I went to Wolmido Island with my family. There has a park called “Wolm theme park”. We boarded a cruise for about one hour and watched Russian performance in it. It makes me very impressing. On the second day, I visited my uncle. All relatives got together and ate delicious traditional food. I think it is a valuable experience with family and relatives because let me understand the importance of family.

강사 첨삭

Good Evening, [이름]! It was so nice to hear that you enjoyed your holiday! I am happy that you accomplised your homework and spent time writing about your holiday! Thank you for always participating in class! Can\'t wait to hear from you again! See you!   Teacher Carmen ^^   Today is the third day of the holiday. >> Correct!   Now I will illustrate how I spent the Chuseok. >> Now, I will illustrate how I spent Chuseok. OR>> I will explain how I spent the holidays. On the first day, I went to Wolmido Island with my family. >> Correct! OR>> I went to Wolmido Island with my family on the first day of the long holiday. There has a park called “Wolm theme park”. >> In that place, there was a park called \"Wolm Theme Park\". We boarded a cruise for about one hour and watched Russian performance in it. >> We boarded on a cruise for an hour and there we watched a Russian performance.   It makes me very impressing. >> I was very impressed. On the second day, I visited my uncle. >>Correct! OR>>I visited my uncle on the second day of the long holiday.   All relatives got together and ate delicious traditional food. >> All of my relatives got together and ate delicious traditional food. I think it is a valuable experience with family and relatives because let me understand the importance of family. >> I think it was a valuable experience with my family and relatives because I made me aware of the importance of having a family.

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