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2021-11-10 · 첨삭 강사 Kate

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what was the bravest thing you\\\\\\\'ve ever done? I was a person who seek safety. So always I didn\\\\\\\'t take action first in anything. But since I became a nurse, I am getting brave. When I saw the emergency patient, I ran to him first. I had jumped up 7 floors for pick up the packed red blood cell for a excessive bleeding patient. And I had compressed the heart on a mount of vomit and blood to save a dying patient. Nowadays I run to a stranger who is about to fall down and I hold him. I think I\'m nosy now.

강사 첨삭

Hello Tina!

I love reading about your bravery! I think it takes a lot of courage to be a nurse. I\'m scared of blood so I don\'t think I can be one. Keep up the good work and I appreciate your writing today. see you tomorrow! ^^

~~Teacher Kate

I was a person who seek safety.

>>I was a person who seeked safety.

So always I didn\'t take action first in anything.

>>CORRECT!
But since I became a nurse, I am getting brave.

>>CORRECT!
When I saw the emergency patient, I ran to him first.

>>CORRECT!
I had jumped up 7 floors for pick up the packed red blood cell for a excessive bleeding patient.

>>I had run up 7 floors to pick up the packed red blood cells for an excessively bleeding patient.
And I had compressed the heart on a mount of vomit and blood to save a dying patient.

>>And I gave compressions on a mount of vomit and blood to save a dying patient.
Nowadays I run to a stranger who is about to fall down and I hold him.

>>Nowadays I can run to a stranger who is about to fall down and hold him up.
I think I\'m nosy now.

>>CORRECT! (teacher\'s note: No, you are not nosy haha. You are just trying to help. ^^)

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