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It is truth that the influence of the government on the society is bigger than that of an individual.

>> It is true that the influence of the government on the society is bigger than that of an individual.

However, it is not impossible that an individual have an effect on the society.

>> However it is impossible that an individual has an effect on the society.
Although an individual, they can sufficiently change the society if they can draw concerns of the public by using journals or media.

>> They can sufficiently change the society by using the journals or media.

Especially the development of the social media made it easy for individuals to have an effect on the society.

>> CORRECT
Let me bring up one story recently occurred in Korea.

>> Let me bring up one story that occurred in Korea recently.

One foreigner from Colombia helped some child who had been likely to encounter a car by screaming the child.

>> One Columbian screamed at the child who was nearly hit by a car.

By the way, the child’s grandfather challenged to the foreigner with saying “why do you scream my grandson?” and hit the guy.

>> The grandfather shouted at the foreigner: \" Why are you screaming at my grandson?\" and suddenly hit the guy.

After that accident, the foreigner wrote the post in the Facebook that story with the comment, “NEVER HELP THE KOREAN IN KOREA”.

>> After the accident, the foreigner post on Facebook saying \"Never help a Korean in Korea.\"

Eventually the post became famous in Korea, and Korean police declared that they will examine the accident.

>> The incident became viral and the Korean police will examine to know the real incident.

Many Korean also aplogized the guy.

>> Many Koreans apologized to the guy