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Homework:
Essay: Some companies make donations to local charities and community groups. Other companies do not and leave it up to their staff to decide whether to make personal donations. Should companies donate part of their profits to charities? State your opinion and provide reasons for your view.
It is the company`s free to make donations. But, I think it is good idea that they make donations to local charities and community groups.
There are some reasons to support my opinion.
Most of all, they could get the profits from people. People will think better of the company\'s image if the companies appreciate it and give it back to society. It will be able to make the companies get more profits in the long run.
Second(ly?), it is happy things for everyone to share their wealth without monopolizing it.
The help will improve the quality of life for those who receive help and make them to have dreams.
Therefore, I think companies should donated part of their profits to charities.
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It is the company`s free to make donations. But, I think it is good idea that they make donations to local charities and community groups.
>> It is the company\'s freedom or discretion to make donations, but it would be a a good idea if they make donations to local charities and community groups.
There are some reasons to support my opinion.
There are some reasons to support my opinion.
>> correct
Most of all, they could get the profits from people. People will think better of the company\'s image if the companies appreciate it and give it back to society. It will be able to make the companies get more profits in the long run.
Most of all, they could get the profits from people. People will think better of the company\'s image if the companies appreciate it and give it back to society. It will be able to make the companies get more profits in the long run.
>> correct (awesome sentences)
Second(ly?), it is happy things for everyone to share their wealth without monopolizing it.
Second(ly?), it is happy things for everyone to share their wealth without monopolizing it.
>> correct (secondly is acceptable)
>> Second, it will make everyone happy if he/she will share their wealth and not monopolize it,
The help will improve the quality of life for those who receive help and make them to have dreams.
The help will improve the quality of life for those who receive help and make them to have dreams.
>> correct (however in English we don\'t want to repeat words so instead of saying help again after receive you can use it-receive it)
Therefore, I think companies should donated part of their profits to charities.
Therefore, I think companies should donated part of their profits to charities.
>> correct (we remove the d part for donated, we say should donate)
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