Human beings are being judged according to their social status and material possession. Old fashione
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The appearance is the first thing people check when they meet others after that, they have time to know each other. People try to figure out social status, age and economic ability because they would like to act differently according to those values. I guess that most people would like to be happy by doing what they like but to do it, sadly, money is the thing people have to consider. It\'s almost impossible to achieve someone\'s goal without money. Foe instance, learning sports, studying specific subjects and taking a trip need to spend huge money. I think people want to be a friend with someone who are rich, smart or might be helpful for themselves. It is common sense that high position people in the society are usually rich because they have a lot of job opportunities and various way to make money. Although, all people know that old fashion values are important and want to follow it, people think that money is the most important factor for their happy life.
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Hi there Mr. [이름]! ^^ How are you today? Oooh, that sounds typical. kkk Thanks for doing your homework! Have a nice Thursday!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
The appearance is the first thing people check when they meet others after that, they have time to know each other.
>>> Appearance is the first thing people check when they meet others, after that, they get to know each other.
People try to figure out social status, age and economic ability because they would like to act differently according to those values.
>>> CORRECT
I guess that most people would like to be happy by doing what they like but to do it, sadly, money is the thing people have to consider.
>>> CORRECT
It\'s almost impossible to achieve someone\'s goal without money.
>>> CORRECT
Foe instance, learning sports, studying specific subjects and taking a trip need to spend huge money.
>>> For instance, learning sports, studying specific subjects and taking a trip requires huge money.
I think people want to be a friend with someone who are rich, smart or might be helpful for themselves.
>>> I think people want to be a friend of someone who are rich, smart or might be helpful for themselves.
It is common sense that high position people in the society are usually rich because they have a lot of job opportunities and various way to make money.
>>> It is a common sense that high position people in the society are usually rich because they have a lot of job opportunities and have various ways to make money.
Although, all people know that old fashion values are important and want to follow it, people think that money is the most important factor for their happy life.
>>> CORRECT
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