human relationship class 3
학생이 쓴 원문
1. Working with other people like team work or team play is the most meaningful work type for me. It is very hard to cooperate with others and gather their opinion for same result, however, I feel really great about achieving excellent result.
2. Value organizational culture is a major force influencing to worker behavior. Especially, values are the most appealing to me among organizational culture. Whenever I do something, I plan detail and I pursue the values of outcomes. Give and take. This sentence is my motto in life. I’m always forwarding to rewarding what I did. Therefore, value is the most important element.
3. First of all, when I obtain good result, I get full of accomplishment and satisfaction. It makes me on Cloud 9. Those two factors are the basic rewards of my job. Salary is second motivation of work and sufficient pay is very crucial to me.
강사 첨삭
Whoa!! You must have put your effort in doing this, [이름]^^
And I am not actually wasting my time checking this, do not say that TT
i am very happy and proud looking at this^^
1. Working with other people like team work or team play is the most meaningful work type for me.
>>1. Teamwork is the most meaningful type for me. It is very hard to cooperate with others and gather their opinion for same result, however, I feel really great about achieving excellent result.>>It is very hard to cooperate with others and gather their opinion for the same result; however, I feel really great about achieving excellent result.2. Value organizational culture is a major force influencing to worker behavior.
>>2. Organizational culture value is a major force influencing worker behavior. Especially, values are the most appealing to me among organizational culture.
>>Especially, values is the most appealing to me in terms of organizational culture. Whenever I do something, I plan detail and I pursue the values of outcomes.
>>Whenever I do something, I plan the details and pursue the value of the outcomes. Give and take. This sentence is my motto in life.
>>\"Give and take\", this sentence is the motto of my life.
I’m always forwarding to rewarding what I did.
>>I am always looking forward to reward myself for what I did.Therefore, value is the most important element. >>CORRECT!3. First of all, when I obtain good result, I get full of accomplishment and satisfaction.
>>3. First of all, when I obtain a good result, I get full accomplishment and satisfaction.
It makes me on Cloud 9.
>> It makes me experience cloud 9. Those two factors are the basic rewards of my job.
>>CORRECT!Salary is second motivation of work and sufficient pay is very crucial to me.
>>Salary is the second motivation of work and of course, sufficient compensation is very crucial to me.
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