Humor is good way to solve a problem.

2014-08-31 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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Humor is a good way to solve a problem. Specailly in a speech which is held with many audiences, we can see many cases in American president speech. Presidnet candidates are always the target of civils who isn't in their side. To make their mind change, they have to explain clearly and briefly what they want to acheive. in this situation, the mood of speech can be heavy no matter what they want to make. Wit can be the best to beak the ice of the speech. Not only breaking ice but also It can make candidates seems more attractive. When we arguing with someone, the winner will be the one who use homorous sentences. because that make people laugh and feel the same way. then he/she can't rebut your opinion. So humor is powerful weapon when it comes to talking.

강사 첨삭

Good afternoon!
How is your weekend going?
Are you having fun? I hope so.
I really admire you for always allotting time to write an essay.
Your ideas are great and you were able to convey it with colorful sentences.
Great! Keep it up!
Kindly go over the corrections below.
Teacher Nina

Humor is a good way to solve a problem.
>> Correct!
Specailly in a speech which is held with many audiences, we can see many cases in American president speech.
>> Especially in a speech which is held in many audiences, we can see many cases in during the American president\'s speech.
Presidnet candidates are always the target of civils who isn\'t in their side.
>> Did you mean: The candidates for presidency are always the target of civils who aren\'t on their side.
To make their mind change, they have to explain clearly and briefly what they want to acheive.
>> To change their mind, they have to explain clearly and briefly what they want to achieve.
in this situation, the mood of speech can be heavy no matter what they want to make.
>> Did you mean: In this situation, the mood of their speech can be stronger no matter what they want to do.
Wit can be the best to beak the ice of the speech.
>> Wit can be the best way to break the ice during a speech.
Not only breaking ice but also It can make candidates seems more attractive.
>> Not only breaking the ice but it can also make the candidates seem more attractive.

When we arguing with someone, the winner will be the one who use homorous sentences.
>> Correct!
>> OR: When we are arguing with someone, the winner will be the one who has a sense of humor.
because that make people laugh and feel the same way. then he/she can\'t rebut your opinion.
>> Because it can make people laugh and feel the same way, then he/ she can\'t rebut his/ her opinions.

So humor is powerful weapon when it comes to talking.
>> So humor is a powerful weapon when it comes to talking.
>> OR: So humor is a power weapon when it comes to expressing your ideas.

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