HW 05.15
학생이 쓴 원문
I want to keep my body fat mass around 15% and make the veins in my arm visible, so I need to work out harder than I do now. I also want to make my shoulder and back wider.
So, I can say my goal in working out is to make my body shape better.
In my golf class, my goal is to get the best grade, so I should train my core to improve my golf swing.
Ultimately, I want to improve my golf skill, and enjoy playing in the field.
To achieve this, I have to work hard and earn money!
강사 첨삭
Hi there, [이름] [이름]!
Congratulations on a well-written homework answer! You can almost perfect the organization and grammar of a basic paragraph development. I am impressed.
Since you have specific goals, you are now on your way to achieve a well-toned physique-one that is irresistible to look at the mirror like a narcissist. ^^ You will respect yourself more when your goal is achieved. I support you.
Take note that nouns mentioned in general in a sentence takes a plural form. Once again, a job well done!
See you.
-T. Donna~
So, I can say my goal in working out is to make my body shape better.
>>> Correct! Very good sentences!
In my golf class, my goal is to get the best grade, so I should train my core to improve my golf swing.
Ultimately, I want to improve my golf skill, and enjoy playing in the field.
To achieve this, I have to work hard and earn money!
>>> In my golf class, my goal is to get the best grade, so I should train my core to improve my golf swing.
Ultimately, I want to improve my golf skills, and enjoy playing in the field.To achieve this, I have to work hard and earn money! Very good sentences!
파워잉글리쉬 영어첨삭교정 서비스에 실제로 접수된 글입니다. 작성자와 글에 등장하는 사람·회사 이름, 연락처 등 개인을 알아볼 수 있는 정보는 모두 지웠습니다. 문법 오류는 학습 자료로서의 가치를 위해 원문 그대로 두었습니다.