HW 1.27
학생이 쓴 원문
Hi, Donna!
I\'m sorry to delay last class, because I have a class on Wednesday and Friday.
First of all, I\'ll try taking a golf course in university this year. I wanna be a sales engineer, so I need to learn a lot of things like sports, music, languages, and so on. Actually, I was so scared to do exercise using back because my back was not good. But, after starting playing tennis, I\'m more confident than before about using my back.
To continue tennis, I\'ll try working out twice a week. I love running outside when the weather is good. From spring, I\'m gonna start running on the ground near my house in Korea.
And I\'m gonna join the tennis club of university. I got a tennis racket for paying around 300,000 won. I usually pay my money when I want to do something like studying, sports, and so on. That\'s the reason I continue something without giving up.
In Hiroshima, I\'ve been riding my bike so much. So, I don\'t want to ride my bike anymore. I only get strong legs.
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름] [이름]!
Do not worry. I totally understand your schedule. I am glad that you still study despite your busy schedule.
It sees like you have a penchant for business sports. Golf is for men who want to expand their connections in business and associates. In addition, tennis is also a sport for high profile people. These are very good choices for sports to enjoy and make good friends with.
All these sports are only possible if you stay active, fit, and healthy. Thus, lift those weights and walk the talk. Exercise and eat healthy always.
Please go over my suggestions to your composition. You did a wonderful job!
See you in class.
-T. Donna~
I\'m sorry to delay last class, because I have a class on Wednesday and Friday.
>>> Correct!
First of all, I\'ll try taking a golf course in university this year. I wanna be a sales engineer, so I need to learn a lot of things like sports, music, languages, and so on. Actually, I was so scared to do exercise using back because my back was not good. But, after starting playing tennis, I\'m more confident than before about using my back.
First of all, I\'ll try taking a golf course in university this year. I wanna be a sales engineer, so I need to learn a lot of things like sports, music, languages, and so on. Actually, I was so scared to do exercise using back because my back was not good. But, after starting playing tennis, I\'m more confident than before about using my back.
>>> First of all, I\'ll try taking a golf course in the university this year. I want to be a sales engineer, so I need to learn a lot of things like sports, music, languages, and so on. Actually, I was so scared to do exercise using my back because it was not good. But after starting playing tennis, I\'m more confident than before about using my back.
To continue tennis, I\'ll try working out twice a week. I love running outside when the weather is good. From spring, I\'m gonna start running on the ground near my house in Korea.
And I\'m gonna join the tennis club of university. I got a tennis racket for paying around 300,000 won. I usually pay my money when I want to do something like studying, sports, and so on. That\'s the reason I continue something without giving up.
To continue tennis, I\'ll try working out twice a week. I love running outside when the weather is good. From spring, I\'m gonna start running on the ground near my house in Korea.
And I\'m gonna join the tennis club of university. I got a tennis racket for paying around 300,000 won. I usually pay my money when I want to do something like studying, sports, and so on. That\'s the reason I continue something without giving up.
>>> To continue tennis, I\'ll try working out twice a week. I love running outside when the weather is good. From spring, I\'m going to start running on the ground near my house in Korea.
And I\'m gonna join the tennis club of the university. I got a tennis racket for 300,000 won. I usually pay my money when I want to do something like studying, sports, and so on. That\'s the reason I continue something without giving up.
In Hiroshima, I\'ve been riding my bike so much. So, I don\'t want to ride my bike anymore. I only get strong legs.
And I\'m gonna join the tennis club of the university. I got a tennis racket for 300,000 won. I usually pay my money when I want to do something like studying, sports, and so on. That\'s the reason I continue something without giving up.
In Hiroshima, I\'ve been riding my bike so much. So, I don\'t want to ride my bike anymore. I only get strong legs.
>>> Correct!
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