HW 1.29

2026-01-30 · 첨삭 강사 Donna

학생이 쓴 원문

When I was in middle school, I went abroad first time. It was Tokyo. After that trip, I started studying hard. I thought that if I studied hard, I could live abroad someday. And now, I am living abroad! There are two countries that I want to live in. Tokyo is the first destination. I think Tokyo is the best city in Asia because it has many cultures, companies, attractions, concerts, and people from different cultures. I actually had a chance to live in Tokyo as an exchange student, but I gave it up because of money. I feel that I will live in Tokyo someday. The second destination is Marrakech, Morocco. I am simply curious about life in the desert. Since I was young, I have wanted to visit the desert. On the game that I enjoyed, it has a dessert location, and I liked playing in this. Every time I see the dessert in TV show or game, I\'m so excited and I really want to go there. And I heard that Morocco is close to Europe, so if I lived in Morocco, I would visit Europe often.

강사 첨삭

Hi there, [이름] [이름]!

Now, I understand why you are in Japan. It is a dream come true. I am proud of you for knowing where you want to be. Japan is the best place for you right now under the sun.

Someday, move to Tokyo and go with the flow of the hustle and bustle of the city. Just like Seoul, it will keep you paced along with its people.

Marrakech is also a dream destination to many. Soon, you will feel its vibe. For now, you need to study well, earn your own money, and travel when the time is right. Then, conquer Europe for business or pleasure.
Thank you for sending me your thoughts about our homework. By writing down your ideas, you are already far ahead from many of your classmates. Stay motivated and diligent. Well done!

See you.

-T. Donna~

When I was in middle school, I went abroad first time. It was Tokyo. After that trip, I started studying hard. I thought that if I studied hard, I could live abroad someday.
And now, I am living abroad!
>>> When I was in middle school, I went abroad for the first time. It was inTokyo. After that trip, I started studying hard. I thought that if I studied hard, I could live abroad someday.
And now, I am living abroad!

There are two countries that I want to live in.
Tokyo is the first destination. I think Tokyo is the best city in Asia because it has many cultures, companies, attractions, concerts, and people from different cultures. I actually had a chance to live in Tokyo as an exchange student, but I gave it up because of money. I feel that I will live in Tokyo someday.
>>> Correct! Very good sentences!

The second destination is Marrakech, Morocco. I am simply curious about life in the desert. Since I was young, I have wanted to visit the desert. On the game that I enjoyed, it has a dessert location, and I liked playing in this. Every time I see the dessert in TV show or game, I\'m so excited and I really want to go there.
And I heard that Morocco is close to Europe, so if I lived in Morocco, I would visit Europe often.
>>> The second destination is Marrakech, Morocco. I am simply curious about life in the desert. Since I was young, I have wanted to visit the desert. On the game that I enjoyed, it has a desert location, and I liked playing in this. Every time I see the desert in TV show or game, I\'m so excited and I really want to go there.
And, I heard that Morocco is close to Europe, so if I lived in Morocco, I would visit Europe often.

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