HW_1031

2018-11-01 · 첨삭 강사 Shelly

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What are some similarities and differences between your neighboring country and your country? Japan is one of the nearest countries around South Korea. Both countries have a sensitive relationship except for only geographical reasons. Not always bad relationship is continued until now. The start was historical affairs that Japan conquered the Cho-sun that was the former name of South Korea in 100 years ago. Since the end of the WW2, Two countries have been competing for each field that are economy, politics, Science and Sports and so on. Of course, Japan yet has stronger than South Korea almost all sectors, as G7 members. If western society sees these both countries, they seem like similar parts. However, they don’t have many common things each other than their have thoughts. First of all, I think that the Japanese are more process type about dealing with their work than other countries in the world. Sony, Toyota which representatives Japan company are known as the superb ability of technology and manufacturing in the world. I think that these developed technologies are caused by a national character in Japan. The number of Nobel prize winner is proven in that fact. They also have a record the most awards in Asia. Accordingly, A lot of Japanese people who have the characteristic that is a process type had an influence on achievements that like written above.

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What are some similarities and differences between your neighboring country and your country?

Japan is one of the nearest countries around South Korea.

>>> Correct.

 Both countries have a sensitive relationship except for only geographical reasons.

>>> Correct.

Not always bad relationship is continued until now.

>>> Correct.

The start was historical affairs that Japan conquered the Cho-sun that was the former name of South Korea in 100 years ago.

>>> Correct.
 Since the end of the WW2, Two countries have been competing for each field that are economy, politics, Science and Sports and so on.

>>>>Since the end of the WW2, two countries have been competing for each field those are economy, politics, Science and Sports and so on.
 Of course, Japan yet has stronger than South Korea almost all sectors, as G7 members.

 >>>Of course, Japan has been stronger than South Korea, almost all sectors, as G7 members.
 If western society sees these both countries, they seem like similar parts.

 >>>If western society sees both countries, they seem similar parts.
 However, they don’t have many common things each other than their have thoughts.

 >>>However, they don’t have many common things.

 First of all, I think that the Japanese are more process type about dealing with their work than other countries in the world.

 >>>First of all, I think that the Japanese are more process type about dealing with their work than other countries in the world.
 Sony, Toyota which representatives Japan company are known as the superb ability of technology and manufacturing in the world.

>>>Sony, Toyota which represent Japan companies are known as the superb ability of technology and manufacturing in the world.
 I think that these developed technologies are caused by a national character in Japan.

>>> Correct.
 The number of Nobel prize winner is proven in that fact.

 >>>The number of Nobel prize winners proved those facts.

They also have a record the most awards in Asia.

>>> They also have a record of having most awards in Asia.

 Accordingly, A lot of Japanese people who have the characteristic that is a process type had an influence on achievements that like written above.

>>> Accordingly, a lot of Japanese people who have the characteristic that were a process type had an influence on achieving what were written above.

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