HW_1108

2018-11-09 · 첨삭 강사 Shelly

학생이 쓴 원문

In your country are the responsibilities of a mother the same as the responsibilities of a father to their families? In South Korea, I think that South Korea has been dominated by Confucianism rather than China where Confucius was born. Even about 30 years ago, Many people in South Korea had thought the existence of distinct gender role between Man and Woman in the right society. That was a kind of prejudice that man has to work outside for feeding their own family and woman has to remain inside for doing housework. However, a Social atmosphere has gradually changed towards equality about gender role while developing educational status in entered 1990s. Numbers of Female are lively able to social activities throughout Korean social areas where to belong to Economy, Politics, science and so on. Many women who have talent that men are emerging as a social leader that is so-called President, CEO and so on. The Winds of Change from outside blow into each household. As a result of above written in the changes, many young mothers trying to do the responsibilities of their own family while getting for Jobs actively. I think that the responsibilities of a mother the same as the responsibilities of a father in their families are proven following the fact that the growth in population of dual income household every year.

강사 첨삭

Good morning [이름]!


Thank you for giving your opinion about your homework. In general, in our country the responsibilities of a mother and a father are different. Women work at the same time do the household chores and take care of the children. Men in general also work to provide for the family and mostly do the decision making in the family.


-Teacher Shelly-


In your country are the responsibilities of a mother the same as the responsibilities of a father to their families?

In South Korea, I think that South Korea has been dominated by Confucianism rather than China where Confucius was born.

>>> Correct!

Even about 30 years ago, Many people in South Korea had thought the existence of distinct gender role between Man and Woman in the right society.

>>> About 30 years ago, many people in South Korea had thought the existence of distinct gender role between Man and Woman in the right society.

That was a kind of prejudice that man has to work outside for feeding their own family and woman has to remain inside for doing housework.

>>> Correct!

 However, a Social atmosphere has gradually changed towards equality about gender role while developing educational status in entered 1990s.

>>> Correct!

 Numbers of Female are lively able to social activities throughout Korean social areas where to belong to Economy, Politics, science and so on.

>>> Correct!
 Many women who have talent that men are emerging as a social leader that is so-called President, CEO and so on.

>>> Correct!

The Winds of Change from outside blow into each household.

>>> Correct!

 As a result of above written in the changes, many young mothers trying to do the responsibilities of their own family while getting for Jobs actively.

>>>Correct!

 I think that the responsibilities of a mother the same as the responsibilities of a father in their families are proven following the fact that the growth in population of dual income household every year.

>>> I think that the responsibilities of a mother is the same as the responsibilities of a father in their families are proven following the fact that the growth in population of dual income household every year.

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