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Actually, It is very difficult for me to do specific things for my community. If someone including me does something for a community, the more people take part in, the better it works. But in fact, I don't know even who is in my just next door. I know nobody who lives in my town. So to improve the community, first of all, I need to gather many people who can do something together.
In my building, I can post a note on the wall. <I want to meet and close to my neighbor. we can talk about our life and be good friends, Plus, we can do good thing for our community. If you want to join me, please knock the 201#'s door.>
If all the basic situation is accepted, I would like to help poor children. teaching for free or baby sitting could be a great idea because my town is near the some universyties. There are many universyty students in my town. They can be a good big sister and a brother to the little children.
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Aurora~ I will not study tomorrow with you^^;;
See U Wed ^^
강사 첨삭
Hi there! Thank you so much for making your composition and also for sharing some information about what you think. Continue to persevere in learning English! Take care and see you in class!
^^, T.Aurora
Actually, It is very difficult for me to do specific things for my community.
>>Correct!
If someone including me does something for a community, the more people take part in, the better it works.
>>If someone like me does something for a community, the more people who will take part, the better it works.
But in fact, I don\'t know even who is in my just next door.
>>But in reality, I don't know even the person living next door.
I know nobody who lives in my town.
>>I don't know anyone living in our town.
So to improve the community, first of all, I need to gather many people who can do something together.>>So for the community to be closer, first, I need to gather many people who will do something as a team or group.
In my building, I can post a note on the wall.
>>Correct!
<I want to meet and close to my neighbor.
>>I want to meet my neighbors an be close with them.
we can talk about our life and be good friends, Plus, we can do good thing for our community.
>>We can talk about our lives, be good friends and we can also do something good for our community.
If you want to join me, please knock the 201#\'s door.> >>If you want to help me, please knock on the door with the number 201.
If all the basic situation is accepted, I would like to help poor children.
>>If all of these are accepted, I would like to help poor children.
teaching for free or baby sitting could be a great idea because my town is near the some universyties.
>>Teaching for free or babysitting could be a great idea because my hometown is near to some universities.
There are many universyty students in my town.
>>There are a lot of university students in my hometown.
They can be a good big sister and a brother to the little children. >>They can be good sisters and brothers to the little children.Aurora~ I will not study tomorrow with you^^;;
>>Correct!See U Wed ^^
>>See you on Wednesday!
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