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학생이 쓴 원문
Due to words limit, I will just put an answer of Q1, and tell the other parts in the class!
I believe I would like to work with your company because it has a stable track record of performance and shows potential for future growth. Neople has maintained stable revenue over a long period through Dungeon & Fighter, establishing itself as a key driver of Nexon\'s overall revenue. Building on this stability, Neople has successfully launched Dungeon & Fighter Mobile using the same IP, demonstrating the experience and expertise to make future projects successful. Furthermore, the release of console and PC games targeting untapped markets like North America and Europe, rather than the saturated mobile market, showcases Neople\'s business expansion capabilities. I hope to contribute my experience and skills to drive results and find fulfillment in the company, thus enabling both myself and the company to grow together.
강사 첨삭
Your response effectively demonstrates a deep understanding of Neople\'s successful track record in the gaming industry, hence, showing your keen interest in contributing to the company\'s growth by emphasizing your desire to leverage your experience and skills to drive results. This aligns well with Neople\'s business expansion goals and expresses your proactive approach to mutual growth and success within the company. Well done on providing a detailed and thoughtful answer!
~ Teacher Maxine
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OR >> I believe that I would like to work with your company due to its consistent track record of performance and its potential for future growth.
Neople has maintained stable revenue over a long period through Dungeon & Fighter, establishing itself as a key driver of Nexon\'s overall revenue.
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OR >> Neople has maintained a stable revenue stream over an extended period through Dungeon & Fighter, establishing itself as a crucial driver of Nexon\'s overall revenue.
Building on this stability, Neople has successfully launched Dungeon & Fighter Mobile using the same IP, demonstrating the experience and expertise to make future projects successful.
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OR >> Expanding on this stability, Neople has successfully launched Dungeon & Fighter Mobile using the same IP, showcasing their experience and expertise in ensuring the success of future projects.
Furthermore, the release of console and PC games targeting untapped markets like North America and Europe, rather than the saturated mobile market, showcases Neople\'s business expansion capabilities.
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OR >> Moreover, the company\'s release of console and PC games targeting untapped markets like North America and Europe, rather than the saturated mobile market, highlights Neople\'s capacity for business expansion.
I hope to contribute my experience and skills to drive results and find fulfillment in the company, thus enabling both myself and the company to grow together.
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OR >> I aim to contribute my experience and skills to drive positive results and find personal fulfillment within the company, thus fostering mutual growth for both myself and the company.
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