HW 2.2
학생이 쓴 원문
I think what makes a travel memorable is people going together and meeting on the trip.
Every time I see some photos on my phone after a trip, I start remembering some memories and feel happy.
Also, I feel kind of sad because we are getting old. And, I don\'t like my past fashion style. Why did I wear this old-style clothes?
Actually, I\'m not interested in foods a lot. So, I pretty forget what I ate on the trip.
I enjoy watching famous sports in this country, and hanging out with local people.
Every time I go to Japan, I always go to stadiums to watch soccer, baseball, and so on.
When I was in Hong Kong, I went to the Happy Valley Stadium to watch the horse race.
I can feel the energy of the locals when I go there.
I like collecting that country\'s coins and bills because I think memorable things are photos and that country\'s money.
Hong Kong\'s coins have Queen Elizabeth and they make me feel like I\'m in Europe.
강사 첨삭
Hi there, [이름] [이름]!
Undeniably, the coming together of people in social circles greatly define the element of fun in a travel. Nevertheless, if you travel alone, you can curate your activities and the people you meet along the journey.
In your case, sports action is one for the books. You enjoy the intensity and cheers of people. I am certain that you also participate well as a member of the crowd.
I agree that every country\'s currency is interesting and historically rooted. You can keep some penny and may not spend them. They become a keep-safe memorabilia of your travel that only you can define how you truly enjoyed.
Thus, read and understand the grammar suggestions made here on your work. This is quite a lengthy and an excellently composed. Thank you very much for all the talent and diligence you put into your work.
See you in class.
-T. Donna~
Every time I see some photos on my phone after a trip, I start remembering some memories and feel happy.
Also, I feel kind of sad because we are getting old. And, I don\'t like my past fashion style. Why did I wear this old-style clothes?
>>> Correct! Very good sentences!
Or: Also, I feel kind of sad because we are getting old. And, I don\'t like my past fashion style. \"Why did I wear this old-style clothes?\"
Actually, I\'m not interested in foods a lot. So, I pretty forget what I ate on the trip.
I enjoy watching famous sports in this country, and hanging out with local people.
Every time I go to Japan, I always go to stadiums to watch soccer, baseball, and so on.
When I was in Hong Kong, I went to the Happy Valley Stadium to watch the horse race.
I can feel the energy of the locals when I go there.
Actually, I\'m not interested in foods a lot. So, I pretty forget what I ate on the trip.
I enjoy watching famous sports in this country, and hanging out with local people.
Every time I go to Japan, I always go to stadiums to watch soccer, baseball, and so on.
When I was in Hong Kong, I went to the Happy Valley Stadium to watch the horse race.
I can feel the energy of the locals when I go there.
>>> Actually, I\'m not interested in foods a lot. So, I pretty forget what I ate on the trip.
I enjoy watching famous sports in a country, and hang out with local people.
Every time I go to Japan, I always go to stadiums to watch soccer, baseball, and so on.
When I was in Hong Kong, I went to the Happy Valley Stadium to watch the horse race.
I can feel the energy of the locals when I go there.
I like collecting that country\'s coins and bills because I think memorable things are photos and that country\'s money.
Hong Kong\'s coins have Queen Elizabeth and they make me feel like I\'m in Europe.
>>> Correct! Very good sentences!
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