HW 2.24
학생이 쓴 원문
I often heard that young couples don\'t have babies and they have only pets. Many of them tend to enjoy their own life and I understand this tendency.
But If I get married, I want to have babies. I think having babies makes people work hard in life.
I enjoy watching short videos about a baby and I\'m happy jus watching these clips.
Some couples don\'t get married legally because there is a possibility of divorce. My uncle also do this because he has divorced.
My uncle has maintained this relationship for more than 20 years.
But I don\'t like this method because it makes it easy to break them up.
I think these are the biggest changes in Korea.
강사 첨삭
Hello, [이름] [이름]!
Thank you for sending your composition last night. I hope that you are doing well today. You were probably caught up with your busy schedule since you went back to South Korea.
The statistics of unmarried people is pretty high in your country. However last year posted an improvement for mothers giving birth.
Someday, you will also get the chance to have your own beautiful family. Divorce should never be an option for you and your wife. Love, support, and respect each other at all times. This also means providing for your family with all they need. Thus, you have to be financially capable to keep them safe, healthy, and happy.
Kindly visit the suggestions I made below to make your composition impeccable for the next. Great job!
See you.
-T. Donna~
But If I get married, I want to have babies. I think having babies makes people work hard in life.
I enjoy watching short videos about a baby and I\'m happy jus watching these clips.
>>> I often hear that young couples don\'t have babies and they have only pets. Many of them tend to enjoy their own lives and I understand this tendency.
But if I get married, I want to have babies. I think having babies makes people work hard in life.
I enjoy watching short videos about a baby and I\'m happy jus watching these clips.
Some couples don\'t get married legally because there is a possibility of divorce. My uncle also do this because he has divorced.
My uncle has maintained this relationship for more than 20 years.
But I don\'t like this method because it makes it easy to break them up.
But if I get married, I want to have babies. I think having babies makes people work hard in life.
I enjoy watching short videos about a baby and I\'m happy jus watching these clips.
Some couples don\'t get married legally because there is a possibility of divorce. My uncle also do this because he has divorced.
My uncle has maintained this relationship for more than 20 years.
But I don\'t like this method because it makes it easy to break them up.
>>> Some couples don\'t get married legally because there is a possibility of divorce. My uncle also did this because he has been divorced.
My uncle has maintained this relationship for more than 20 years.
But I don\'t like this method because it makes it easy to break them up.
I think these are the biggest changes in Korea.
My uncle has maintained this relationship for more than 20 years.
But I don\'t like this method because it makes it easy to break them up.
I think these are the biggest changes in Korea.
>>> Correct!
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