HW 2.27
학생이 쓴 원문
I think the benefits of aging are different by how to live their own life.
Someone who earns enough money lives comfortably. But If I don\'t earn many money, I\'ll try to earn money even if I am getting old.
I think many people get relaxed as aging. They don\'t be afraid as easily as younger people. And it\'s the biggest strength.
Actually, It\'s harder to find the benefits of aging than to find the disadvantages of aging.
Seeing my mother, I\'m feeling like aging is not good, because she is not good at hers legs, so she doesn\'t enjoy travelling although she likes going a trip.
And my father always say that I don\'t like my face, look at my wrinkle, I\'m so much old, and so on.
강사 첨삭
Hello, [이름] [이름]!
We all age everyday-some gracefully, while others, stressfully. We decide which way we are heading.
Before, it was thought that wisdom comes with age. At the onset of AI, we can now be wiser than ever if we access accurate information in the web. Hence, sans aging quickly, we can be wiser.
While your legs are steady and sturdy, enjoy time with the people you love. By the time you have aged, there will be no regrets. Do not get me wrong. Avoid doing foolish things. ^^
Please read and analyze carefully the suggestions made on your composition. Good job!
See you.
-T. Donna~
Someone who earns enough money lives comfortably. But If I don\'t earn many money, I\'ll try to earn money even if I am getting old.
>>> I think the benefits of aging are different by how to live my own life.
Someone who earns enough money lives comfortably. But if I don\'t earn (much/ a lot) of money, I\'ll try to earn money even if I am getting old.
I think many people get relaxed as aging. They don\'t be afraid as easily as younger people. And it\'s the biggest strength.
Someone who earns enough money lives comfortably. But if I don\'t earn (much/ a lot) of money, I\'ll try to earn money even if I am getting old.
I think many people get relaxed as aging. They don\'t be afraid as easily as younger people. And it\'s the biggest strength.
>>> I think many people get relaxed as they age. They don\'t get afraid as easily as younger people. And it\'s their biggest strength.
Actually, It\'s harder to find the benefits of aging than to find the disadvantages of aging.
Actually, It\'s harder to find the benefits of aging than to find the disadvantages of aging.
>>> Actually, it\'s harder to find the benefits of aging than to find the disadvantages of aging.
Seeing my mother, I\'m feeling like aging is not good, because she is not good at hers legs, so she doesn\'t enjoy travelling although she likes going a trip.
And my father always say that I don\'t like my face, look at my wrinkle, I\'m so much old, and so on.
>>> Seeing my mother, I\'m feeling like aging is not good, because she is not good with her legs, so she doesn\'t enjoy travelling although she likes going a trip.
And my father always says that he doesn\'t like his face looking at his wrinkles; he is so much older, and so on.파워잉글리쉬 영어첨삭교정 서비스에 실제로 접수된 글입니다. 작성자와 글에 등장하는 사람·회사 이름, 연락처 등 개인을 알아볼 수 있는 정보는 모두 지웠습니다. 문법 오류는 학습 자료로서의 가치를 위해 원문 그대로 두었습니다.