HW 2.5
학생이 쓴 원문
The most unforgettable gathering is when I go to pick up our dog with my family in Busan. It\'s fifteen years ago, but I vividly remember this moment. Our dog was so shy and week that he was below bed because other dogs bullied him. But when we met for the first time, he came close to us and acted cute. So we chosen him (actually he chosen us) and he became [이름]\'s family. It\'s my unforgettable moment. And before that day, we went to the local market in Busan, and ate a lot of crabs. It just popped into my head.
And the most unforgettable gathering as bad meaning is Korea Thanksgiving day three years ago. I always went to my grandmother\'s house except that day, because I wanted to date with my girl friend. But after this, my grandmother was getting worse, and she can\'t talk with me. So, I keep regretting that I didn\'t go that day.
강사 첨삭
Hello, [이름] [이름]!
Who would have thought that a dog would complete your family gathering! Pets are a part of our family since we accept them as our daily companions. At times, they behave better than human beings because they do not answer back when you are mad.
How is your dog nowadays?
When we were young, we could make our decisions that gratified our whims. Now, that we are older, we realize that time is not something we can simply rewind- our parents and grandparents are aging faster and time might be limited. So if you still have them in your life today, never miss the chance to be with them. Bring your girlfriend to meet them.
Your grammar suggestions are getting fewer each time. I am happy to see how much you have improved in exposition in grammar and meaning alike. Great job! Keep it up.
See you.
-T. Donna~
>>> The most unforgettable gathering is when I went to pick up our dog with my family in Busan. It\'s fifteen years ago, but I vividly remember this moment. Our dog was so shy and weak that he was below the bed because other dogs bullied him. But when we met for the first time, he came close to us and acted cute. So we chose him (actually he chose us) and he became [이름]\'s family member. It\'s my unforgettable moment. And before that day, we went to the local market in Busan, and ate a lot of crabs. It just popped into my head.
And the most unforgettable gathering as bad meaning is Korea Thanksgiving day three years ago. I always went to my grandmother\'s house except that day, because I wanted to date with my girl friend. But after this, my grandmother was getting worse, and she can\'t talk with me. So, I keep regretting that I didn\'t go that day.
>>> The most unforgettable gathering that has a negative vibe was the Korean Thanksgiving day three years ago. I always went to my grandmother\'s house except that day, because I wanted to have a date with my girl friend. But after this, my grandmother was getting worse, and she can\'t talk with me. So, I keep regretting that I didn\'t go that day.
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