HW#23 What are the best and worst things about smartphones?
학생이 쓴 원문
Hi, teacher! Here are my opinions.
First, I think the best things about smartphones is the chatting service. In Korea, Kakaotalk is the one of the famous chatting apps.
It makes people communicate easily. Before the smartphones being released, we used 2G cell phones. As far as I can remember, we had to pay 30 wons to send message. It looks like cheap. but when I was in middle school, I sent almost 10000 messages. And now I can send many messages for free. That\'s why I think this is the best thing about smartphones.
The worst thing is that it make conversation with each other reduced. I can see easily that scenes when I go to cafes or restaurants.
People just look down their smartphone instead of talking to each other. It looks so starks.
강사 첨삭
Hi Jonathan!
Here are my corrections.
First, I think the best things about smartphones is the chatting service. In Korea, Kakaotalk is the one of the famous chatting apps.
>>First, I think the best thing about smartphones is the chatting service. In Korea, KakaoTalk is the one of the famous chatting apps.
It makes people communicate easily. Before the smartphones being released, we used 2G cell phones. As far as I can remember, we had to pay 30 wons to send message. It looks like cheap. but when I was in middle school, I sent almost 10000 messages.
>>Correct!
As far as I can remember, we had to pay 30 wons to send message. It looks like cheap. but when I was in middle school, I sent almost 10000 messages.
>>As far as I can remember, we had to pay 30 won to send a message. It looks like cheap but when I was in the middle school, I sent almost 10,000 messages.
And now I can send many messages for free. That\'s why I think this is the best thing about smartphones.
>> Correct!
The worst thing is that it make conversation with each other reduced. I can see easily that scenes when I go to cafes or restaurants.
>>The worst thing is that it makes conversations reduced. I can easily see scenes when I go to cafes or restaurants.
People just look down their smartphone instead of talking to each other. It looks so starks.
>>People just look down their smartphones instead of talking to each other.
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