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2013-02-13 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY: How has your family background affected the way you see the world? My family changed my life background. They told me to have a dream. So I always thinks about my dream. I chosed my dream become to a bussinessman. It will give high salary ang I will like that job. Then I can live hapilly. So that's the reason that why I chosed that jobs.

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Good afternoon! Thank you so much for sending this in. I am so proud of you! You were able to express yourself, but of course, be careful with your diction. Anyway, I hope that you are having a great time. See you! _T.Jeny^^ HOMEWORK FOR TODAY:How has your family background affected the way you see the world? My family changed my life background. They told me to have a dream. >>My family changed my life because they advised me to have a dream.So I always thinks about my dream. I chosed my dream become to a bussinessman. >>So I always think about my dream and I chose to be a businessman.It will give high salary ang I will like that job. Then I can live hapilly. So that\'s the reason that why I chosed that jobs. >>I wil give high salaries to my employees and I will love my job to live happily. This is the reason why I chose this job.

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