HW 3.11
학생이 쓴 원문
I think I\'m going to live in my hometown in Daegu, and I want to own a comic book store. I want to make the space that every person can rest and enjoy reading comic books. Also I can offer some foods to them such like ramen, tteokbokki, and drink.
And I want to open Japanese class or English class and teach for free, or open Korean academy in Japan. I want to share knowledge I have and make people get more chance to interact with foreigners.
Maybe I could be a senior tour guide. I can introduce Daegu to tourists. It could be fun!
But the most important goal for me is to be healthy. I don\'t want to bother someone because of me. I\'ll do my best to stay healthy. I don\'t want to die alone in the hospital or nursing home. My hope is to die during traveling abroad.
강사 첨삭
Hello, [이름] [이름]!
By now, you have clearly imagined your retirement. Giving free lessons is very rare nowadays. I am not surprised that you want to give back to your hometown. I met so many kind people from Daegu in class in the past.
You will be an excellent tour guide because you are multi-lingual. As you speak in English, you can connect to any Westerner who can speak the language. You can please Japanese people as well as your own.
Finally, you can achieve all these goals only by possessing good health. It is true that health is wealth. Stay fit always and do your best to succeed in your retirement life plan.
Go over my grammar suggestions underscored in some of your sentences. You did a wonderful job!
See you in class.
-T. Donna~
>>> I think I\'m going to live in my hometown in Daegu, and I want to own a comic book store. I want to make the space that every person can rest and enjoy reading comic books. Also, I can offer some food to them such like ramen, tteokbokki, and drink.
And I want to open Japanese class or English class and teach for free, or open Korean academy in Japan. I want to share knowledge I have and make people get more chance to interact with foreigners.
And I want to open Japanese class or English class and teach for free, or open Korean academy in Japan. I want to share knowledge I have and make people get more chance to interact with foreigners.
>>> I want to open a Japanese class or an English class and teach for free, or open a Korean academy in Japan. I want to share knowledge I have and make people get more chance to interact with foreigners.
Maybe I could be a senior tour guide. I can introduce Daegu to tourists. It could be fun!
Maybe I could be a senior tour guide. I can introduce Daegu to tourists. It could be fun!
>>> Correct!
But the most important goal for me is to be healthy. I don\'t want to bother someone because of me. I\'ll do my best to stay healthy. I don\'t want to die alone in the hospital or nursing home. My hope is to die during traveling abroad.
But the most important goal for me is to be healthy. I don\'t want to bother someone because of me. I\'ll do my best to stay healthy. I don\'t want to die alone in the hospital or nursing home. My hope is to die during traveling abroad.
>>> But the most important goal for me is to be healthy. I don\'t want to bother someone because of me. I\'ll do my best to stay healthy. I don\'t want to die alone in the hospital or nursing home. My hope is to die during a travel abroad.
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