HW 3.16
학생이 쓴 원문
I think the worst vice is drunk driving. Drinking causes a lot of mistakes, but I think the worst of them is a car accident. I watched the news about this. It can cause big accidents like 10 car collisions.
When I was in middle school, a senior I\'m close to died because of drunk driving accident. He was kind of a punk in school. He was riding a bike with his friend at that time, even not taking a helmet. The driver can\'t see guys making U turns. So, it was difficult to revive because he hurt his brain.
Oh, after writing this, I have to add riding a bike to the worst vice.
강사 첨삭
Hi there, [이름] [이름]!
I could not agree more that this is one of the worst vices ever. As you said, it results to many lives lost and damages to properties.
It is the wrong kind of confidence that some people believe they gain in drinking alcohol. In a society when everything is controlled, they want to let lose, hence, drink driving.
Riding a bike is fine when bikers stay on the lane and never drink. A motorcycle ride is the same. Over speeding and drunk drinking at all cost should never take place.
Congratulations for composing the introduction and conclusion of your essay! Master the use of \'a\' and \'the\' as you go along with your writing exercises. Overall, you did so well.
See you.
-T. Donna~
>>> Correct! Very good sentences!
When I was in middle school, a senior I\'m close to died because of drunk driving accident. He was kind of a punk in school. He was riding a bike with his friend at that time, even not taking a helmet. The driver can\'t see guys making U turns. So, it was difficult to revive because he hurt his brain.
When I was in middle school, a senior I\'m close to died because of drunk driving accident. He was kind of a punk in school. He was riding a bike with his friend at that time, even not taking a helmet. The driver can\'t see guys making U turns. So, it was difficult to revive because he hurt his brain.
>>> When I was in middle school, a senior I\'m close to died because of a drunk driving accident. He was kind of a punk in school. He was riding a bike with his friend at that/ the time, even not taking a helmet. The driver can\'t see the guys making U turns. So, it was difficult to revive him because he his brain had a blunt trauma.
Oh, after writing this, I have to add riding a bike to the worst vice.
Oh, after writing this, I have to add riding a bike to the worst vice.
>>> Correct! Very good sentences!
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