HW 3.17
학생이 쓴 원문
First of all, they don\'t think about their future at all. They just live without thinking, especially doing drugs. It messed up many people\'s life and their family\'s life. I heard that there are huge industries about drug related to cartel, gang and mafia. These groups ruin their countries and people.
Second, they want to forget their bad thoughts like money, house, work, and so on. My father always drink after working on construction. He said if I do not drink today, I can\'t sleep because I can not quite thinking about work. I frequently drink before the announcement day of the results so I don\'t think about it.
강사 첨삭
Hi there, [이름] [이름]!
Social drinking is acceptable. Regular, constant, and intentional drinking is a bad choice. This is the same with any type of vice.
It matters that at your young age, you can see how your choices will determine your future. You are smart enough.
When you experience exposure to vices with the people you love, that is when you realize how badly life becomes when they are out of control. Ergo, live well.
The underlined parts of your composition contain suggestions ranging from singular-plural forms, and subject-verb agreement. Study them carefully. You did so well. Carry on.
See you.
-T. Donna~
>>> First of all, they don\'t think about their future at all. They just live without thinking, especially doing drugs. It messed up many people\'s lives and their family\'s too/ as well. I heard that there are huge industries about drug cartel, gangs and mafia. These groups ruin their country and people.
Second, they want to forget their bad thoughts like money, house, work, and so on. My father always drink after working on construction. He said if I do not drink today, I can\'t sleep because I can not quite thinking about work. I frequently drink before the announcement day of the results so I don\'t think about it.
Second, they want to forget their bad thoughts like money, house, work, and so on. My father always drink after working on construction. He said if I do not drink today, I can\'t sleep because I can not quite thinking about work. I frequently drink before the announcement day of the results so I don\'t think about it.
>>> Second, they want to forget their bad thoughts like money, house, work, and so on. My father always drinks after working in the construction. He said if he does not drink today, he can\'t sleep because he can not quite think about work. I frequently drink before the announcement day of the results, so I don\'t think about it.
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