HW 3.20

2026-03-24 · 첨삭 강사 Donna

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I went to my uncle\'s home when I was a child. It was so happy to sleep there, play game with my cousins, and do soccer at a playing field. I was so close to my cousin older than a year. But since we were getting older, we grew apart. Even if we meet together, we just look out smartphone, and don\'t say a lot. It\'s so sad. Sometimes I\'m missing these days. I heard that my friends are like that too. I\'m gonna suggest playing tennis together to my uncles.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름] [이름]!

Times change and people mature. Struggles, pain, and anxiety make people mature. You and your cousins are no different from this. Perhaps it does not have to be life this. Perhaps, people grow old faster because they forget to play like children. They should never lose the \"child\" who is \"playful\" in them.

You should initiate conversations next time.

Take note of redundant ideas and fuse them together. It makes your sentences easier to understand and they appear more organized. Moreover, be consistent with the point of view of your speaker in your composition. I you used singular noun (s/he, it) use this all throughout your essay. Same goes with plural (we, they, I).

Overall, good job!

See you later in class.

-T. Donna~

>>> I went to my uncle\'s home when I was a child. It/ I was so happy to sleep there and play soccer with my cousins at a playing field. I was so close to my cousin who is older than a year. But since we were getting older, we grew apart. Even if we meet (together), we just look at our smartphones, and don\'t say a lot. It\'s so sad. Sometimes I\'m missing these days.

I heard that my friends are like that too.

>>> Correct!

I\'m gonna suggest playing tennis together to my uncles.

>>> Correct!

Or: I am going to suggest playing tennis together to my uncles. (going to: formal structure)

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