hw-3 end

2018-11-28 · 첨삭 강사 Charry

학생이 쓴 원문

Other people said she is crazy. She was often nervous and very sensitive since then, even though when she is ok. She lost her fortune and sold a house for her medicine. At first she used sleeping pills to sleep but she misused them she had them too much. The doctor said she is suffering Alzheimer. The old lady's name was Moora but after loosing her memory she became Rose. Rose was worried about her sickness so she tried to take Ted to the orphanage. However, Ted said no and he kept next to Rose. As her sickness is getting worse, Rose went to the street she didn't go back to her dinzy and small room. Ted has been next to her. They slept together and enjoyed meal together there. They became the homeless fianlly but when someone came close to Ted, she hit them and get them away. She did her best to protect Ted even when she was crazy. One day, young man came there and asked him "Your grand mother's name is Moora?" Ted said "No". 'The man looks nice and kind...' Ted thought so.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]! ^_^
Here\'s the final part.
Thanks for writing this.

I hope Ted will have a happy ending too. ^_^v
See you in class tomorrow.
~Teacher Charry :*


Other people said she is crazy.

>> CORRECT!

She was often nervous and very sensitive since then, even though when she is ok.

>> She was often nervous and very sensitive since then, even though when she was ok.

She lost her fortune and sold a house for her medicine.

>> She lost her fortune and sold her house for her medicine.

At first she used sleeping pills to sleep but she misused them she had them too much.

>> At first she used sleeping pills to sleep but she misused them and had too much of them.

The doctor said she is suffering Alzheimer.

>> The doctor said she is suffering from Alzheimer\'s disease.

The old lady\'s name was Moora but after loosing her memory she became Rose.

>> CORRECT!

Rose was worried about her sickness so she tried to take Ted to the orphanage.

>> CORRECT!

However, Ted said no and he kept next to Rose.

>> However, Ted said no and he stayed next to Rose.

As her sickness is getting worse, Rose went to the street she didn\'t go back to her dinzy and small room.

>> As her sickness worsened, Rose went to the street and didn\'t go back to her dingy and small room.

Ted has been next to her.

>> Ted had been next to her.

They slept together and enjoyed meal together there.

>> They slept together and enjoyed a meal together there.

They became the homeless fianlly but when someone came close to Ted, she hit them and get them away.

>> They finally became homeless but when someone came close to Ted, she hit them and drove them away.

She did her best to protect Ted even when she was crazy.

>> CORRECT!

One day, young man came there and asked him \"Your grand mother\'s name is Moora?\"

>> One day, a young man came there and asked him, \"Your grand mother\'s name is Moora?\"

Ted said \"No\".

>> Ted said, \"No\".
\'The man looks nice and kind...\' Ted thought so.

>> \'The man looks nice and kind.\' Ted thought to himself.

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