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Is this the place where we live? This is the house that I've ever dreamed to live. The problem is many people cannot picture what it will look like after their houses are given makeovers. It's hard to believe that it's the same house. Although Kim assures that makeover can add value to a property, we can't explain why people buy a house and pay that price. In other words, giving your house a makeover doesn't guarantee financial benefits. Then what should you do to convince potential customers to make a contract. According to Park, a successful regional realtor, It's good idea to show before & after pictures to customers. He says you should start with convincing your customers to take a makeover for one room, after that get customers to apply it for the whole house. And he also says you need to emphasize potential benefits of a makeover. If people point negative aspects, you should transform them positively
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Hi there!Happy Friday to you!How\'s it going?Thank you for sending me your composition.I just want to remind you to check the spelling of the words.Here are 2 websites of what I promised you yesterday. I hope you enjoy watching.http://www.fanpop.com/clubs/keeping-up-with-the-kardashianshttp://kimkardashian.celebuzz.com/tag/keeping-up-with-the-kardashians/And these other links are for the shows that I watch.http://www.history.com/shows/pawn-starshttp://www.history.com/shows/american-pickershttp://www.history.com/shows/american-restorationMaybe it might interest you too.See you in class!-T. WENDYit\'s ominous sign, starting to gamble is shooting yourself in the foot>> It\'s an ominous sign, starting to gamble is like shooting yourself in the foot.Is this the place where we live? >> CorrectThis is the house that I\'ve ever dreamed to live. >> CorrectThe problem is many people cannot picture what it will look like after their houses are given makeovers. >> The problem is that many people cannot picture what it will look like after their houses is given makeovers. It\'s hard to believe that it\'s the same house. >> CorrectAlthough Kim assures that makeover can add value to a property, we can\'t explain why people buy a house and pay that price. >> Although Kim assures that the makeover can add value to a property, we can\'t explain why people buy a house and pay that price. In other words, giving your house a makeover doesn\'t guarantee financial benefits. >> CorrectThen what should you do to convince potential customers to make a contract. >> Then what should you do to convince potential customers to make a contract?According to Park, a successful regional realtor, It\'s good idea to show before & after pictures to customers. >> According to Park, a successful regional realtor, It\'s a good idea to show the before & after pictures to customers. He says you should start with convincing your customers to take a makeover for one room, after that get customers to apply it for the whole house. >> He says you should start by convincing your customers to take a makeover for one room, after that get the customers to apply it for the whole house.And he also says you need to emphasize potential benefits of a makeover. >> CorrectIf people point negative aspects, you should transform them positively
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