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There are so many things that i want to change in my past. But if i choose one of that, that would be the time that i rejected to take an opportunity to go Japan for studying. When i was in hight school, there was program that students from Korea go to Japan for studying with full scholarship. At that time I was nominated representing for my high school, and lukiily i was selected for that program. But i regected that opportunity because i don't want to be an engineer or scientist. The one thing that made the program less valuabe was that i could only apply for engineering and science, and both of them was not my interests, at least at that time. But now i am thinking that if i took that opportunity, i might have better chance to accomplish my dream. I mean four year living in Japan definiately guarantees speaking Japanese fluently, and by choosing mathematics as my major, i would have more chance to get a job in Finance.
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Hi there!!! ^^
That was an astonishing composition.
I guess that\'s how life happens.
Sometimes we need to give up some chances to follow the way we think is right.
At the end, we regret, but that\'s not the only thing we could do.
At least we could earn from it.
Teacher Kathrine ^_^
There are so many things that i want to change in my past.
>> CORRECT! [Just don\'t forget to capitalize a letter when necessary. ^^]
But if i choose one of that, that would be the time that i rejected to take an opportunity to go Japan for studying. >>But if I choose one of that, that would be the time that I reected to take an opportunity to go to Japan to study.
When i was in hight school, there was program that students from Korea go to Japan for studying with full scholarship.
>> When I was in high school, there was a program that students from Korea can go to Japan to sudy with a full scholarship.
At that time I was nominated representing for my high school, and lukiily i was selected for that program.
>> At that time I was nomited as a representative for my school and luckily I was selected for that program.
But i regected that opportunity because i don\'t want to be an engineer or scientist.
>> CORRECT!
The one thing that made the program less valuabe was that i could only apply for engineering and science, and both of them was not my interests, at least at that time.
>> CORRECT!
But now i am thinking that if i took that opportunity, i might have better chance to accomplish my dream.
>> But now I am thinking, if I took that opportunity, I might have a better chance to accomplish my dream.
I mean four year living in Japan definiately guarantees speaking Japanese fluently, and by choosing mathematics as my major, i would have more chance to get a job in Finance.
>> I mean, four yea\\rs living in Japan definitely garauntees speaking Japanese fluently. And by choosing mathematics as my major, I would have a bigger chance to get a job in finance.
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