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2013-05-10 · 첨삭 강사 Kathrine

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Essay: How would it feel to walk in space? I don't kwow if one day I have chance to travel space, and even I have chance to do, I don't know if I can walk in space. Anyway let's presume that I have chance to walk in space. The first feeling would be awesome. View in space should be fantastic. I always thought about what it would look like looking down earth in space. And my guess is the earth would look like a pearl in black sea. And if I extend my imagination to going anywhere in universe, I really want to see a black hole. When we were children, we used to be told about the time travel using the blakc hole. SO I want to check it out if it is really possible. And being the first person to know that truth should be more awesome.

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Hi there! Thank you for sharing your thoughts. I enjoyed reading what you have to say. I agree that I would really be awesome to walk in space or explore the universe. But would not be afraid?   Always, T.Kathrine     Essay: How would it feel to walk in space?I don\'t kwow if one day I have chance to travel space, and even I have chance to do, I don\'t know if I can walk in space. >>I don\'t know if I would have the chance to travel space, and if I would have the chance to, I don\'t know if I\'d have the chance to walk in space. Anyway let\'s presume that I have chance to walk in space. >>Anyway, let\'s presume that I have a chance to walk in space. The first feeling would be awesome. >>It would really be awesome. View in space should be fantastic. >>The view in space must be fantastic. I always thought about what it would look like looking down earth in space. >>I always thought about what would it look like seeing earth from space. And my guess is the earth would look like a pearl in black sea.>>And I thought that earth looks like a peal in a black sea. And if I extend my imagination to going anywhere in universe, I really want to see a black hole. >>And if I go on imagining exploring the universe, I would really want to see a black hole. When we were children, we used to be told about the time travel using the blakc hole. >>When I was young, I was told about traveling time through the black hole. SO I want to check it out if it is really possible. >>So I would want to check if it is really possible. And being the first person to know that truth should be more awesome. >>And being the first person to know that truth would be more awesome.

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