HW 4.1
학생이 쓴 원문
I think that a busy vacation is better than a relaxing vacation, because students can develop their skills, such as studying languages, doing projects, and participating in an internship. It\'s busy to do all those on the semester, so we have to set priorities.
I think it\'s a ideal vacation for junior. But, I want to go somewhere. Mt friends spend together in Hiroshima and I are planning to go Okinawa in next summer vacation. I think I\'ll have some free time in late August, so I hope to travel at that time.
강사 첨삭
Hi there again, [이름] [이름]!
I totally agree that honing your skills to be ready for your dreams is one of the best ways to spend a vacation. That time, it is not a vacation but a training period. This separates the winners from whiners at work or business someday.
Let us admit it, our time on earth is limited. So while we can, we ought to do things that will add value and meaning to our lives.
Congratulations for perfecting the first part of your composition. For the second, please note down all the grammar suggestions.
See you.
-T. Donna~
>>> Correct! Very good sentences!
I think it\'s a ideal vacation for junior. But, I want to go somewhere. Mt friends spend together in Hiroshima and I are planning to go Okinawa in next summer vacation. I think I\'ll have some free time in late August, so I hope to travel at that time.
I think it\'s a ideal vacation for junior. But, I want to go somewhere. Mt friends spend together in Hiroshima and I are planning to go Okinawa in next summer vacation. I think I\'ll have some free time in late August, so I hope to travel at that time.
>>> I think it\'s an ideal vacation for juniors. But, I want to go somewhere. My friends spend time together in Hiroshima and I was planning to go Okinawa for the next summer vacation. I think I\'ll have some free time in late August, so I hope to travel at that time.
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