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2014-02-14 · 첨삭 강사 Erine

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Write an essay. - I signed up swimming pool near by home to take a lesson in swimming yesterday. I can float on the water but I can`t swim very well. I wanted to learn swim since long before but I do not have time. but I should regret it if I do not learn swim now. lesson time is started 8:00 PM and I take a lesson for 50min. What is the worst thing parents can do to their children? - First thing is that partents say them "you have to study hard or you will regret it later" - Second, Parents compare to another children. - last, Parents offen say "don`t do that"

강사 첨삭

Hello! Happy Wednesday to you! :) I had great time during our class. Your s
entence construction is quite good. You\'ve tried your best to deliver your ideas although you forgot about the adverbs (pu-sa). I suggest you to read more about adverbs and its proper usage. Adverbs modify adjectives, verbs and another adverb. Some of them, they end in -ly. Check your spelling and I already underlined them for you. :) 
Enjoy the rest of the day! 

T. Erine ^^ 

- I signed up swimming pool near by home to take a lesson in swimming yesterday.
>> DID YOU MEAN:  I signed up for a swimming class in a school nearby my house yesterday. 
>> OR: Yesterday,  I signed up for a swimming class in a school nearby my house. 
I can float on the water but I can`t swim very well.
>> CORRECT! 
>> OR: I can float on the water but i just can\'t swim very well. 
I wanted to learn swim since long before but I do not have time.
but I should regret it if I do not learn swim now.
>> I wanted to learn how to swim ever since but I do not have time. I will regret if I will not learn now. 
>> OR:  I wanted to learn swimming long before but i don\'t have time. If I won\'t learn it now, I\'ll surely regret it. 
lesson time is started 8:00 PM and I take a lesson for 50min.
>> The swimming lessons starts at 8:00 PM and takes about 50 minutes. 

- First thing is that partents say them \"you have to study hard or you will 
regret it later\"
>>First thing is that parents always say to their children to study very hard or you\'ll regret it later. 
- Second, Parents compare to another children.
>>Secondly, parents compare their children to others. 
- last, Parents offen say \"don`t do that\"
>> Lastly, parents often say the phrase \"don\'t do that\".

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