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2014-05-29 · 첨삭 강사 Mona

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I was a little taken a back when i saw my hw cause i have pressure to write somthing in english!.. but i'll try as possible as i can What are your accomplishments? I'll talk about my goal. They are 2 kinds of target. First thing is that short term goal, i really want to be a good employee in a service field with bright smile and give a kind service to customer like cabin crew which i used to be. Going to master degree school is my second goal. when i was a high school stu, i want to get into a counsel but even i pass the test and interview, i gave up to go that school because u know in korea we need major school's name when we get a job after graduate, so that school's status was not that good and i didn't go there. Anyway i regret not to go there and when i get marry with a man who has enough money, i'll try to go master degree school! i don't know what im talking about ,, sorry and thanks see u tomr! ^^

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]!^^
I think you tried your best to express your thoughts in your composition.
You talked about the things you want to accomplish rather than your accomplishments. kkk
Nice try anyway!^^
Next time please write the words completely and don\'t use the shortcuts.^^

And I hope that I understood your ideas well.
If you have some questions please don\'t hesitate to ask me.
~~T. Mona
 
I was a little taken a back when i saw my hw
>>I was taken aback when I saw my homework.
cause i have pressure to write somthing in english!..

>>Because I feel pressured whenever I write something in English.
but i\'ll try as possible as i can

>>But I\'ll try to do what I can.

What are your accomplishments?

I\'ll talk about my goal.

>>I\'ll talk about my goals.
They are 2 kinds of target.

>>There are two kinds of goals
OR do you mean >>I have a short term goal and a long term goal.
First thing is that short term goal, i really want to be a good employee in a service field with bright smile and give a kind service to customer like cabin crew which i used to be.

>>First, my short term goals is to be employed in a service field like being a cabin crew.
I worked as a cabin crew before and I always wore a bright smile and gave a kind service to our costumers.

Going to master degree school is my second goal. when i was a high school stu, i want to get into a counsel but even i pass the test and interview, i gave up to go that school because u know in korea we need major school\'s name when we get a job after graduate, so that school\'s status was not that good and i didn\'t go there.

>>Having a master\'s degree is my second goal. When I was a high school student, I wanted to attend collage but even though I passed the test and the interview,I gave up ging to that school.
You know here in Korea, the name of the school you came from/graduated from is very important/essential when you get a  job.
The school\'s status is not good so I didn\'t go there.
 Anyway i regret not to go there and when i get marry with a man who has enough money, i\'ll try to go master degree school!

>>Anyway, I regret not going there. But when I marry a man who has enough money, I\'ll try to get my master\'s degree.
i don\'t know what im talking about ,,

>>I don\'t know what I\'m talking about.
sorry and thanks

>>Sorry and thanks.
see u tomr!
^^
>>See you tomorrow.

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