HW
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I was a little taken a back when i saw my hw
cause i have pressure to write somthing in english!..
but i'll try as possible as i can
What are your accomplishments?
I'll talk about my goal. They are 2 kinds of target. First thing is that short term goal, i really want to be a good employee in a service field with bright smile and give a kind service to customer like cabin crew which i used to be.
Going to master degree school is my second goal. when i was a high school stu, i want to get into a counsel but even i pass the test and interview, i gave up to go that school because u know in korea we need major school's name when we get a job after graduate, so that school's status was not that good and i didn't go there. Anyway i regret not to go there and when i get marry with a man who has enough money, i'll try to go master degree school!
i don't know what im talking about ,,
sorry and thanks
see u tomr!
^^
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름]!^^
I think you tried your best to express your thoughts in your composition.
You talked about the things you want to accomplish rather than your accomplishments. kkk
Nice try anyway!^^
Next time please write the words completely and don\'t use the shortcuts.^^
And I hope that I understood your ideas well.
If you have some questions please don\'t hesitate to ask me.
~~T. Mona
I was a little taken a back when i saw my hw
>>I was taken aback when I saw my homework.
cause i have pressure to write somthing in english!..
>>Because I feel pressured whenever I write something in English.
but i\'ll try as possible as i can
>>But I\'ll try to do what I can.
What are your accomplishments?
I\'ll talk about my goal.
>>I\'ll talk about my goals.
They are 2 kinds of target.
>>There are two kinds of goals
OR do you mean >>I have a short term goal and a long term goal.
First thing is that short term goal, i really want to be a good employee in a service field with bright smile and give a kind service to customer like cabin crew which i used to be.
>>First, my short term goals is to be employed in a service field like being a cabin crew.
I worked as a cabin crew before and I always wore a bright smile and gave a kind service to our costumers.
Going to master degree school is my second goal. when i was a high school stu, i want to get into a counsel but even i pass the test and interview, i gave up to go that school because u know in korea we need major school\'s name when we get a job after graduate, so that school\'s status was not that good and i didn\'t go there.
>>Having a master\'s degree is my second goal. When I was a high school student, I wanted to attend collage but even though I passed the test and the interview,I gave up ging to that school.
You know here in Korea, the name of the school you came from/graduated from is very important/essential when you get a job.
The school\'s status is not good so I didn\'t go there.
Anyway i regret not to go there and when i get marry with a man who has enough money, i\'ll try to go master degree school!
>>Anyway, I regret not going there. But when I marry a man who has enough money, I\'ll try to get my master\'s degree.
i don\'t know what im talking about ,,
>>I don\'t know what I\'m talking about.
sorry and thanks
>>Sorry and thanks.
see u tomr!
^^
>>See you tomorrow.
I think you tried your best to express your thoughts in your composition.
You talked about the things you want to accomplish rather than your accomplishments. kkk
Nice try anyway!^^
Next time please write the words completely and don\'t use the shortcuts.^^
And I hope that I understood your ideas well.
If you have some questions please don\'t hesitate to ask me.
~~T. Mona
I was a little taken a back when i saw my hw
>>I was taken aback when I saw my homework.
cause i have pressure to write somthing in english!..
>>Because I feel pressured whenever I write something in English.
but i\'ll try as possible as i can
>>But I\'ll try to do what I can.
What are your accomplishments?
I\'ll talk about my goal.
>>I\'ll talk about my goals.
They are 2 kinds of target.
>>There are two kinds of goals
OR do you mean >>I have a short term goal and a long term goal.
First thing is that short term goal, i really want to be a good employee in a service field with bright smile and give a kind service to customer like cabin crew which i used to be.
>>First, my short term goals is to be employed in a service field like being a cabin crew.
I worked as a cabin crew before and I always wore a bright smile and gave a kind service to our costumers.
Going to master degree school is my second goal. when i was a high school stu, i want to get into a counsel but even i pass the test and interview, i gave up to go that school because u know in korea we need major school\'s name when we get a job after graduate, so that school\'s status was not that good and i didn\'t go there.
>>Having a master\'s degree is my second goal. When I was a high school student, I wanted to attend collage but even though I passed the test and the interview,I gave up ging to that school.
You know here in Korea, the name of the school you came from/graduated from is very important/essential when you get a job.
The school\'s status is not good so I didn\'t go there.
Anyway i regret not to go there and when i get marry with a man who has enough money, i\'ll try to go master degree school!
>>Anyway, I regret not going there. But when I marry a man who has enough money, I\'ll try to get my master\'s degree.
i don\'t know what im talking about ,,
>>I don\'t know what I\'m talking about.
sorry and thanks
>>Sorry and thanks.
see u tomr!
^^
>>See you tomorrow.
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