HW

2014-08-25 · 첨삭 강사 Kathrine

학생이 쓴 원문

If I will have had enough money, time and stamina to go on an expedition , then, I would like to go to the area of amazon which is not too dangerous before I die. In the Amazon, I don't want to discover something and just watching for do not diying? But I really hate mosquitos and bugs. So.. this is the lastest choice. And I want to go to the Alps. when I child , I read The Heidi of alps which was written by Johanna Spyri. I was impressed from that book. If I go there, I really want to have a taste of the milk and cheese of the Alps. Because I have had some assume that it will have a good taste when I taste in local area even if I don't like milk much.

강사 첨삭

Hello Jenna! ^^

Well, traveling to Amazon is included in my bucket list actually. haha.

How I wish I could go there too.
Exploring the unknown and unusual places sound exciting and adventurous for me.

And I have watch a cartoon series of Heidi when I was young.

I still remember her face and some scenes there.

It seems like it is really fun to live in the Alps.
Anyway, hopefully you could go there. ^^

See you later my dear!


Always,
Kathrine ^^

 


If I will have had enough money, time and stamina to go on an expedition , then, I would like to go to the area of amazon which is not too dangerous before I die.

>>  If I will have enough money, time, and stamina to go to an expedition, then I would like to go to an area in the Amazon which is not too dangerous before I die.

In the Amazon, I don\'t want to discover something and just watching for do not diying? 

>>  In the Amazon, I don\'t want to discover something and I just watch and observe things which would not kill me.
 But I really hate mosquitos and bugs.

>>  correct!

So.. this is the lastest choice.

>>  So this is the least choice I have.
 And I want to go to the Alps.

>>  correct!

 when I child , I read The Heidi of alps which was written by Johanna Spyri.

>>  When I was a child, I read about the Heidi of Alps which was written by Johanna Spyri.

 I was impressed from that book.

>>  I am impressed by that book.

If I go there, I really want to have a taste of the milk and cheese of the Alps.

>>  If I will go there, I really want to taste the milk and cheese of the Alps.

Because I have had some assume that it will have a good taste when I taste in local area even if I don\'t like milk much.

>>  Because I have tasted milk and cheese in a local area in my country so I have assumed that it will really taste good.

파워잉글리쉬 영어첨삭교정 서비스에 실제로 접수된 글입니다. 작성자와 글에 등장하는 사람·회사 이름, 연락처 등 개인을 알아볼 수 있는 정보는 모두 지웠습니다. 문법 오류는 학습 자료로서의 가치를 위해 원문 그대로 두었습니다.

다른 영어첨삭교정 보기

영어첨삭교정 ·