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2014-08-26 · 첨삭 강사 Jessie

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If you could erase one part in history which one would it be and why? I thnink that most people will say same answer. Because there was a Japanese colonial era in 1910~1945. It was very stigmatic for us.At that time there were a lot of labor and torture. So I want to erase this part of history.

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Hello there! Thanks for sharing your opinion. Let me tell you about the answers of my other students tomorrow. You might be right. They might have the same answer. ^^, Anyway, please go over the corrections. You can also try to make your answers longer. Expand your explanations, give examples, reasons,  the effect and so on. Have a good day! ~T. Jessie~ If you could erase one part in history which one would it be and why?I thnink that most people will say same answer. >> I think most people will have the same answer. Because there was a Japanese colonial era in 1910~1945. >> There was a Japanese colonial era in 1910~1945. OR>> We were colonized by Japan in 1910~1945. It was very stigmatic for us. >> Correct! At that time there were a lot of labor and torture. >> Correct! So I want to erase this part of history. >> Correct!

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