HW 5.7
학생이 쓴 원문
I want to use anime characteristics because Japan is famous about their IP, such as Nintendo, Anime, and so on. \"Feel the real anime world!\"
I can use the image that Japan is safe, so I can make a slogan \"The most safe country to travel alone\"
Many foreigners visit Japan to experience Japan\'s traditional atmosphere in Kyoto, Hyogo, and so on. So, to express the traditional thing, \"Feel the timeless beauty of Japan\"
Hiroshima has beautiful nature and the history of nuclear bomb and the World War 2. So, I want to express Hiroshima\'s slogan \"peace and chaos\", and I think some edgy tourists who enjoy visiting Chernobyl and doing dangerous activities would love this slogan.
강사 첨삭
Hi. [이름] [이름]!
I asked for one slogan and you gave me four. That is so Japanese! ^^ It is really obvious that your penchant with Japan runs deep into their culture. They should give you an award for this.
Via all your descriptions, it makes me want to see Japan through these slogans\' lenses and discover the wonders these places bring.
In the grammar aspect of the underlined words, take note of the correct us of \"a\" and \"the\" and memorize their correct placements before nouns. Put a period every after sentence. Excellent job!
See you later.
-T. Donna~
>>> I want to use anime characteristics because Japan is famous for their IP, such as Nintendo, Anime, and so on. \"Feel the real anime world!\"
I can use the image that Japan is safe, so I can make a slogan \"The most safe country to travel alone\"
Many foreigners visit Japan to experience Japan\'s traditional atmosphere in Kyoto, Hyogo, and so on. So, to express the traditional thing, \"Feel the timeless beauty of Japan\"
>>> I can use the image that Japan is safe, so I can make a slogan \"The most safe country to travel alone\".
Many foreigners visit Japan to experience its traditional atmosphere in Kyoto, Hyogo, and so on. So, to express the traditional thing, \"Feel the timeless beauty of Japan\".Hiroshima has beautiful nature and the history of nuclear bomb and the World War 2. So, I want to express Hiroshima\'s slogan \"peace and chaos\", and I think some edgy tourists who enjoy visiting Chernobyl and doing dangerous activities would love this slogan.
>>> Hiroshima has a beautiful nature and the history of the nuclear bomb and the World War 2. So, I want to express Hiroshima\'s slogan \"peace and chaos\", and I think some edgy tourists who enjoy visiting Chernobyl and doing dangerous activities would love this slogan.
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