HW 7.1
학생이 쓴 원문
I think people who speak English well are very cool. They can communicate with people from the world. And they can enjoy more information and culture, such as pop music, books, movies, and so on.
I also felt fun when I became able to speak Japanese. It gave me a lot of experiences, such like talking with Japanese people and living in Japan. I believe that studying English would give more opportunity in my life. Maybe I would be able to live in many countries, and I can choose one of them. But if I could only speak Korean, I would probably have to live in Korean all my life.
The last reason is I have to study English for graduation!
강사 첨삭
Hello there, [이름] [이름]!
You are really an international man! It is true that learning another language broadens your perspective and chances of becoming not only a better person but also open to multiple doors of opportunities.
While having fun, you are learning in another language and also immersing yourself to the culture of Japan and English speaking countries. Your knowledge becomes limitless.
Hence, keep enjoying your tasks in language learning like you are only playing and reap the advantages they bring to your life.
Review my grammar suggestions. There are just a few. Great job!
See you in class.
-T. Donna~
>>> I think people who speak English well are very cool. They can communicate with people from the world. They can enjoy more information and culture, such as pop music, books, movies, and so on.
I also felt fun when I became able to speak Japanese. It gave me a lot of experiences, such like talking with Japanese people and living in Japan. I believe that studying English would give more opportunity in my life. Maybe I would be able to live in many countries, and I can choose one of them. But if I could only speak Korean, I would probably have to live in Korean all my life.
>>> I also felt the fun when I was able to speak Japanese. It gave me a lot of experiences, such as talking with Japanese people and living in Japan. I believe that studying English would give more opportunities in my life. Maybe I would be able to live in many countries, and I can choose one of them. But if I could only speak Korean, I would probably have to live in Korean all my life. Very good ideas!
The last reason is I have to study English for graduation!
>>> Correct!
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